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Ausaka

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PostPosted: Mon Sep 08, 2008 6:02 pm


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PostPosted: Mon Sep 08, 2008 6:05 pm


Please understand that this is a fan fiction, and that Hideo Kojima the true owner of the Metal Gear and Metal Gear Solid series has ended his series and has verbally informed his public that he is hoping that someone will continue on with the series in their own style and ideas.

There are a lot of references within this story to the many different characters of MG and MGS, as well the staff of Hideo Kojima and Konami.

Note: This is the first story that I have ever put as much research, time and effort into however I have little to no Grammar skills, and sometimes I misplace words or leave them out. I do not use my disability as a crutch, but on occasion this happens due to my dyslexia, in which I have issues with vowel as well not fully typing things out. Also when commenting, I tend to miss certain points that are presented, so if I do not address every concern or question fully then I am deeply sorry, and I ask that you be patient with me and kindly inform me.

Thank you Ausaka (AW)

Ausaka

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Shanra the Dragon Bard
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PostPosted: Mon Sep 08, 2008 6:35 pm


Ok, I've read all three chapters and you have a great deal of grammatical and punctuation errors in all three. I can see that each chapter is introducing new characters and how it seems they are all coming together, that's good. There are a few places where you choice of words don't flow well, or you're using the wrong tense, but overall, it's not bad at all. I'm no expert on MGS, as I have never seen it or read it, so I can't comment on the content of the story.
PostPosted: Mon Sep 08, 2008 6:59 pm


Yeah my grammar and punctuation is not my strength what so ever, and I have had many comments on that in the past. I usually have my friend go over it for me, but he wasn't around for sometime. ^-^
As for the story, its based off of a game for the Play Station, as well Nintendo. A lot of people haven't read the story much or know much about it, as its a bit of a twister of events. That's kind of the reason I placed this story so far into the future that your really don't need to know the game's plot to read it, however some of the references will be a little lost.

I thank you for your input, and I will see about having my friend come by and take a look at it, and hopefully re-submit the cleaner more correct version lol.

Ausaka

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Shanra the Dragon Bard
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PostPosted: Tue Sep 09, 2008 5:43 am


If you would like, I would be happy to do that for you in my spare time. Just say the word. Oh and the word would need to be in a pm, because I don't know if I'll remember to check back here.
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