Welcome to Gaia! ::

The Shoujo-Ai & Yuri Guild

Back to Guilds

 

Tags: girls, love, yuri, shoujo ai 

Reply ..The Arena.. ___________Fanart, Fanfiction, and Original Creations
[L] Hell is place called Earth

Quick Reply

Enter both words below, separated by a space:

Can't read the text? Click here

Submit

Vampire_Reiko

4,450 Points
  • Bunny Hoarder 150
  • Bunny Hunter 100
  • Bunny Spotter 50
PostPosted: Thu Oct 02, 2008 2:49 pm


Okay...this is meant as a symbolism paper for a class called Creative Writing. The original was yaoi but I changed some of the text so it could be a yuri. THIS IS A SAD STORY. You have been warned.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

From childhood I was raised as a strict Catholic. Naturally as Catholic extremists my parents taught me that being gay was a sin and that gay people burn for an eternity in the fiery depths of hell. Little did I know that hell was a place on Earth.

* * *


It was a scorching hot summer day at a California beach. Sweat coated my feminine face and rockin’ curvasious body. I worked out a lot to look smokin’ hot for the boys. Strangely, I never had a crush on one though. There were tons of people at the beach. As I scanned for some friends I was supposed to meet from church, some skinny chick from my Creative Writing class at school approached me.

“Hey beautiful; you’re looking FINE today,” she flirted.

Wow. I’ve never met a lesbian before. Does she want to want to go hell? I took a good look at him and noticed her beautiful fire print bikini. My heart was pounding like it was going to leap out of my chest. I became very nervous. At this moment I knew I was attracted to this babe. “Please don’t do this to me, I don’t want to go to hell. You’re too tempting,” I begged.

“God made us this way so we can’t go to hell for it. By the way, what’s your name? Mine is Jamie,” Jamie stated and asked. She made a good point so I decided to let destiny take me.

“Christine.” I replied
“Well Chrissy girl, no need to resist your ‘temptation’. Come over here and sit by me,” she demanded.

We chatted for what it seemed like hours. I turned my head to scan the area. I finally spotted my fellow Church friends. Before I even had a chance to do anything, I felt Jamie’s soft lips on my cheek. I knew at this point I was screwed.

My buddies were awed in shock. Soon, they all started running towards us shouting, “Get the f***** and the traitor!” I grabbed Jamie’s arm and started to run. Jamie was as slow as a turtle so they started gaining on us. I stopped and picked her up bridal style to speed things up. We ended up running to the empty rocky side of the beach. As I turned to look back I tripped on a rock. I hit my head hard on another rock.

* * *


When I regained consciousness I was tied to a dead tree. I looked to the side and saw Jamie was tied to the tree next to me. She had a rainbow of bruises all over her body. Tears swelled up in my eyes. “WHY WOULD YOU DO THIS?!” I screamed at my former friends who stood in front of me laughing.

“Because God hates f*****s. They are an abomination and they don’t deserve to live,” Eve retorted.

“Now you two shall burn just like you will in hell.” Mary cackled. He lit a match and set Jamie’s tree ablaze.

“CHRISSY!” Jamie shrieked in agony. I was bawling my eyes out at this point.

“It’s your turn. I’m sorry to do this to a former friend, but it must be done.” Eve apologized as he lit my tree on fire. I felt the scorching hot flame begin to melt the skin on my feet.

The flames of hell truly exist on Earth.
PostPosted: Thu Oct 02, 2008 4:27 pm


XD you forgot to change "He" into "She" a couple a times.... it doesn't really make sense.... & I kinda find it stereotypical.... if they were catholic, they'd know that A, Jesus supposedly died for their sins, no matter what the sin is, B, you can't kill anyone, that includes holocausts, & C, you shouldn't judge, thats what their god's for. Not to mention, you can't burn people now in days, its just unheard of. Also, a kiss on the cheek aint that bad, it isn't homo erotic either. Its just a kiss. Judea kissed Jesus on the cheek, that didn't make either of them gay.

But otherwise, its an alright story... You just kinda needed to get your facts straight... but then, most people who say they're catholic, know nothing of the religion its self, therefore, I doubt that you'd know that much. Only reason why I know this is cause I go to a catholic school (I'm not catholic, though)

Impmon51


Vampire_Reiko

4,450 Points
  • Bunny Hoarder 150
  • Bunny Hunter 100
  • Bunny Spotter 50
PostPosted: Thu Oct 02, 2008 4:55 pm


Impmon51
XD you forgot to change "He" into "She" a couple a times.... it doesn't really make sense.... & I kinda find it stereotypical.... if they were catholic, they'd know that A, Jesus supposedly died for their sins, no matter what the sin is, B, you can't kill anyone, that includes holocausts, & C, you shouldn't judge, thats what their god's for. Not to mention, you can't burn people now in days, its just unheard of. Also, a kiss on the cheek aint that bad, it isn't homo erotic either. Its just a kiss. Judea kissed Jesus on the cheek, that didn't make either of them gay.

But otherwise, its an alright story... You just kinda needed to get your facts straight... but then, most people who say they're catholic, know nothing of the religion its self, therefore, I doubt that you'd know that much. Only reason why I know this is cause I go to a catholic school (I'm not catholic, though)


Dangit I was afraid I would miss a few...anyways, I fixed it.

I was raised a Catholic so I know those from the bible. NOT ONE Catholic teenager my age who knows I'm an Atheist has followed A and C though. This story is based off of all of those "Catholics" in my grade BUT in my story they take it to a level above.

I know it has it's flaws, but that's why I like it. The extremeness of it makes it more interesting in my opinion.
PostPosted: Thu Oct 02, 2008 8:04 pm


Its just some criticism. I'm just saying that some of it doesn't make sense. I know a couple of gay guys who go to my school, & 97% of the students are Catholic, none of them ever tried to kill them, or even speak badly about them. Not even the fathers, & they, if anyone, should be strict Catholics. Matter a fact, they say "Its good that you're honest".

Also, let me remind you that most Catholics don't read the bible. I can assure you that no student in that school read the bible, if they did, everyone would get an A in theology.

Impmon51


Corbilchan

Dangerous Elder

5,500 Points
  • Citizen 200
  • Friendly 100
  • Dressed Up 200
PostPosted: Sat Oct 03, 2009 5:48 am


Wow that a really sad story,to be judge and torture like that with no say or freedom it's just not fair at all crying
Reply
..The Arena.. ___________Fanart, Fanfiction, and Original Creations

 
Manage Your Items
Other Stuff
Get GCash
Offers
Get Items
More Items
Where Everyone Hangs Out
Other Community Areas
Virtual Spaces
Fun Stuff
Gaia's Games
Mini-Games
Play with GCash
Play with Platinum