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 Posted: Sat Oct 25, 2008 12:44 pm
"Matt your going to help me right?"
" Of course Mels."
" Well don't screw up"
" I won't Mello I'm grateful u chose me to help you."
" Don't use that sarcasm with me Matt"
" I'm not using any sarcasm Matt, remember this"
"What?"
Matt hugs Mello in a tight embrace.
" I love u Micheal"
Mello pulled away quickly.
" Just do as your told."
" Sure."
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Two weeks Later
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" Damnit wheres Matt?!!"
" I'm back Mello!"
" Where were you?!"
" At the pub down the street."
" well get back to work."
" i didn't flirt with any one there I'm saving my virginity for u!"
" Stop screwing around."
Matt pushes Mello to the closest wall. Before Mello could say a word Matt silenced him with a rough kiss. Mello pushes Matt off of him.
" Matt ur drunk go to bed."
" Come with me Mello."
Mello ignores Matt and goes into the survellience room.
" God Matt ur such a ........... Idiot."
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Day before there death
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Mello is starting to have naughty dreams of Matt
"Tommorow I will win."
" 'We' will win."
" Yeah but if we don't make it Matt you gotta tell me your last words."
" You should already know."
"Just tell me."
Matt gets his face close to Mellos lips inches apart.
"That I love you."
Mello blushes lightly
"Knock it off with that Matt."
Matt lightly brushes his lips next to mellos.
"Sorry Mello so what about you?"
" Matt I - I wish you good luck."
" Oh uh, thanks."
Matt looks slightly depressed and walks away slowly.
"Night."
"Crap"
Mello pushes Matt to the wall. Mello kisses Matt for only a few seconds.
" I need you Matt got it?"
"S-Sure."
Mello pulls away and walks to his room.
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After matt dies
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"Matt i never thought u would be killed forgive me."
' last night i should have told u.'
suddenly there was a sharp pain in mellos chest
"Kira"
mello was trying to fight against it but he couldn't.
"Matt i love...."
then darkness was about to conquer him
and with his last breathe he sid
" u too."
then mellos body was cold and soon to be burned by kiras doings.
The End
tell me what u think.
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Posted: Sat Oct 25, 2008 1:53 pm
2 Things.
1. Mel's name is Mihael, not Michael. People commonly get that wrong.
2. The story sounded like an rp and there was just too much dialog. I'm not fond of dialog.
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Posted: Mon Oct 27, 2008 1:13 pm
Mello's name is Mihael. Other than that, it is cute yet sad story. I wish it had a bit more detail in the story.
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Posted: Mon Oct 27, 2008 1:25 pm
ehhhhh im sorry for the format im not good at writng the neat way and im usually in a hurry. i feal comfy writing this way. also no movement well im lazy but aren't all writers at some points. again details again im lazy. i feel personally proud of this fanfic cuz i never ever finish a story i write down i also stayed up till 4 am to write this on a school night. do u know how hard it is when ur parents espn or something and know when ur up. i might write more but...... sweatdrop either way im happy people have read this and commented. so i thank u leader-sama for showing my creative side and my friends in real life who read this and supported me. whee
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Posted: Tue Oct 28, 2008 2:04 pm
ßëŷǿŋđ ßĩятħđǻŷ ..::..:: O 3O Well i liked it ^-^b awesomenessness XD::..::.. Ŷou Čan Ǿnly §lit Ǻ Ŧhroat §o ƒar
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Posted: Sun Nov 09, 2008 11:27 am
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Posted: Wed Dec 10, 2008 2:36 pm
Saigocage 2 Things. 1. Mel's name is Mihael, not Michael. People commonly get that wrong. 2. The story sounded like an rp and there was just too much dialog. I'm not fond of dialog. I agree. There was a lot of dialogue. o.o'
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