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 Posted: Sun Oct 09, 2005 3:49 am
Hey y'all,
This is most obviusly my portfolio. I write poetry and song lyrics, lots of, and am also in the middle of writing a story, though that is going ridiculously slowly.
About me... I'm 15, going to a boarding school in Dorset, England (and therefore will not be on that often in term time, but hopefully often enough), I like most things apart from running. I'm not lazy, I play A-team rugby, squash and hockey, but running on it's own is so boring that if I was George dubya, I'd blow it up. I LOVE all types of music, especially emo, indie and melodic rock, and you'll see that in this portfolio. plus I'm really wierd, so if you see words like
daji
come up from time to time, or
ajongink
please don't worry. It's all part of the circle of life.
So, better get some posting done, eh?
p.s. - I will put poetry on script post, and songs on ornate. If I remember.
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Posted: Sun Oct 09, 2005 3:52 am
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Posted: Sun Oct 09, 2005 3:56 am
Summer revelations
My trumpet call: "People are getting very ignorant these days!!!"
Take up the neon light
Discard your revelatory sights
Make sure that nothing penetrates your veil of ignorance.
Push everyone away
Make winter out of May
Restrict yourself to flights of crazy fancy.
The summer revelations
Blocked by your mental wall
Are clamouring for justice
As one by one they fall
Under foot and under tree
They crawl between the gaps
Then die and gasp and sink
And fail.
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Posted: Sun Oct 09, 2005 3:58 am
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Posted: Sun Oct 09, 2005 8:40 am
Hmmm......your poems are nice.They all have some sort of moral or meaning behind it.Excellent.Not much about the way or style your poems are written,except that I like'd to comment that your poems have a sorta of rhyme scheme,don't they?Anyway,keep up the nice work.
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Posted: Thu Oct 13, 2005 9:52 am
cheers!! first criticism, always good... thanks.
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Posted: Thu Oct 13, 2005 9:54 am
Myrmidon
I've always been a fan of any poetry that simply sounds good. This is one of my favourite of all my poems, simply because I love the words in it and how they fit together.
Envy splits a mind
Like a crystal brilliant spectacle
Shined oblong throughout swamps of character -
And monument
Rose pearls cut coral crazed
Sun.
And stoop to lows as yet unforeseen
By those who should forsee them.
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Posted: Thu Oct 13, 2005 9:56 am
BTW, don't ask me what he above poem is about...
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Posted: Fri Oct 14, 2005 10:41 am
I love your poetry
All of it
It's fantastic
It's tasty
(Tasty for my mind because just reading it I can hear it swirrling like a melodie and thats what poetrys supposed to be like!)
Just reading it makes me want to write and write and never stop.
Keep writing! I want to read more of it! heart heart
Yes, I am a little crazy...
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Posted: Mon Oct 17, 2005 1:44 pm
rofl rofl rofl
good, good, this is good
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Posted: Mon Oct 17, 2005 1:53 pm
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this is a song i just wrote while travelling to a buddhist monastery on a school trip. So why it isn't more enlightened I shall never know. But anyway, I was hoping that, since I've only written the first verse and chorus, y'all could help me out suggesting lyrics, anything, and I'll try to keep updating it.
p.s. I know you kinda need the tune, but if it helps, the two syllable lines in the chorus go up in pitch and volume each one
The only remnant of your life
Is a napkin number on my bedside
Trampled under a million books
And a million footsteps, a million looks
Take this one last grateful stare
Before I scream my heart out to the night air
I ran down streets of empty cars
That slowly pick at these scars
(chorus)
She said, she said, she said, she said, sha said, she said
She knows she's already dead
Inside, her mind, it's black, and outside, I cried, all night
Stop telling me it's alright
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Posted: Fri Oct 21, 2005 6:16 pm
Dogs For Hands
Is this a song? Or a poem? or a fish?
A cry from out of bounds
Comes bounding over
The long grass
Tall, without its wafer thin parade
Or pockets, hanging low with higher grades
Sing sings they lift you up
My name is shooting
Up messages
Fires raging and rain can't put them out
Kings age and blue barrages shout
Dugouts of metal and glass
Protect us
We fly high so we can fall fast
God help us
Right now I need to relax
So why don't you just leave
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Posted: Fri Oct 21, 2005 6:44 pm
You Know I Can't Cope With Change
Recently my thoughts
Have turned and spun
I got first hand knowledge of change
And somewhere someone's thinking
What to do with us
You know just fine how crazy this all is
You know that soon the meaning fades
Recently I've sung
A million songs
My bedroom carpet's all worn through
And somewhere silence haunts me
Invades my empty soul
You know we're not just metaphors
You know that feelings never fade
My head is aching
It's so unfair
And I miss you every day
The million scars in my mind
Count for nothing now
I find exhilaration
In your every step and breath and beat
Irregularity was not
My forte,
But it seems to be my life now
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