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 Posted: Thu Jan 13, 2005 5:33 am
Oh! how to tell thee, thou art my life,
Oh how to tell, thou art the soul,
Thy innocent laugh doth lighten my heart,
Thy tears wash the darkness away,
Oh the smile, the soft laughter,
Doth vanquish the clouds dat bring sorrow and scorn,
Oh! to to tell, what thou art to me........
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Posted: Tue Feb 01, 2005 1:19 pm
>Looks dreamily into space<
That's beautiful. I love it. It's absolutely marvolous! I cant's take how good it is! You should have it published. It's awesome. It's so Shakespearean. I'm not kidding. It's just great!
>Runs out of breath<
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Posted: Thu Feb 03, 2005 7:57 am
yup I agree! I like poems like this, though I can't write like that heart
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Posted: Sun Feb 06, 2005 4:28 pm
NeoDaDevil Oh! how to tell thee, thou art my life, Oh how to tell, thou art the soul, Thy innocent laugh doth lighten my heart, Thy tears wash the darkness away, Oh the smile, the soft laughter, Doth vanquish the clouds dat bring sorrow and scorn, Oh! to to tell, what thou art to me........ For one, don't use internet slang like "dat" in poems, please. ^^ And two, I'm sure it's a typo, but you've got "to" twice there. Other than that, it's a nice poem with a Shakespearean (I just totally butchered that word) use of language, which I haven't seen before, so I honestly couldn't tell you if it's good comparatively or not. ^^ Keep tweeking it and it can only get better.
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