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xXBurned_Before_DawnXx

PostPosted: Fri Feb 06, 2009 6:03 pm


GOOD BYES
Goodbyes last to long
Good byes aren't forever
When you're away i cant be strong
I need you here with me
As the years go on we'll change and part ways
and for now you won't hear my plea
so until that day
that we must part
you'll be the one
the only one that owns my heart
PostPosted: Mon Feb 16, 2009 11:42 pm


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Not So Good But Good Work At Least You Try ~
Line 1 And 2 Quite Confusing ~
a Tips For You ~
If You Can Rhyme The Poem . It Would Be More Beautiful ~
That's All Thank You ~

firezz3
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