Hey all,
Could I have some feedback on this version of Ash Like Snow's lyrics? Rhyming and everything. It's only loosely based on the exact translation. Tried to keep the cheese to minimum. What do you all think?
Your sky
Dyed red with blood you've spilt
Don't you feel resentment?
You don't mind you have killed?
The friend I used to know
Died long ago
Smothered by this ash that falls like snow
Not as it seems
This world, this war, this day
I never dreamed
You'd soon become this way
They will come for you
Am I alone, in this war, this hell I'm living
No one hears my cry, there's no reply
All the people you've hurt
Why can't you see them all, why can't you try?
See them falling from the sky
They fall, ash like snow
They'll come for you, some day
You fool
Say, have you lost all sense?
Against this anesthesia you have no defense
The people whom I loved
I used to love
Have drift away, what are you thinking of?
Not as it seems
It soon will turn to shame
You've never dreamed
Of all your kin you've slain
They will come for you
I'm not afraid
Of any pain, of blood, of ruin
Yet this pain that I feel
Will never heal
If your war never ends
Even if light's extinguished for all time
You're still oblivious, are you blind?
They fall, ash like snow
They'll come for you one day
They will come for you, yeah
Ash like snow
It's floating down from your sky
Ash like snow
Ash like snow
Let me hear why I have to fight
Am I alone, in this war, this hell I'm living
No one hears my cry, there's no reply
All the people you've hurt
Why can't you hear them all, why can't you try
Hear them screaming, hear them cry
To you
Won't you ever reply?
(it's falling from your sky)
The grief I feel, you've no clue
(baby i come for you)
Every time I recall that you're a stranger now it cuts so deep
This heart of mine won't last much longer, yet still it beats
Each time I hurt I must grow stronger
I've come this far
We'll come for you some day
^.^
