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 Posted: Fri Jan 14, 2005 5:52 pm
Ok, what Im going to do now, is just put all of my works into one thread.
Bear with me, then I can easily keep track of all the pieces Ive done, and all the comments Ive recieved.
I'll update every week or so I guess, to alow time for people to react to my work.
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Posted: Fri Jan 14, 2005 5:54 pm
My Tea A Free Verse Poem
The debris that remain at the bottom of my mug,
Slightly shaken when I lift the bag,
Are extra particles of my life...
Not needed,
Unnecessary,
And slightly bitter when mixed into the water
(which is already bursting with flavour)
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Posted: Fri Jan 14, 2005 5:54 pm
Gypsy Blue Wow! I'm really not a huge poetry fan, but I like that! It was incredibly strong until you threw in the brackets; I found that threw off the rhythm that had been informally established in the poem. That may have also bee intentional on your part, too, I don't know. But nicely done! The title makes it seem like it's going to be something pleasant and a bit quaint, but you turn it around nicely.
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