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The Road of No Return [Pokemon]

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Norgefier-san

PostPosted: Thu Apr 30, 2009 12:26 am


Title: The Road of No Return
Penname: The Cheez

Category: Pokemon
Genre: Angst/Drama
Rating: K+
Disclaimer: I do not own Pokemon or any of its related characters

Summary: Now eighteen years of age, Ash Ketchum returns from the Sinnoh region to his home in Pallet Town. Although, there a few complications - two years of travelling alone has changed Ash, and not necessarily for the better. No D&P.

Author Notes: This story is currently being rewritten due to some personal dissatisfaction with the plot. Thus, this version has been discontinued and the new version will be posted separately when it is completed.
Also, this story is written in an alternate timeline with the assumption that the events of Diamond and Pearl never happened. Also, I am also writing this using the assumption that Ash continues to age throughout the anime, ie. I am ignoring the floating timeline. This means that Ash would be 15-16 by the end of the Battle Frontier, thus making him 18 at the beginning of my story.
PostPosted: Thu Apr 30, 2009 12:33 am


Teaser:

He stood there, gazing over the peaceful scene before him. The little town had shut its doors for the night and everything was quiet. The young man smiled as he listened to rowdy children being shushed by their mothers. His eyes panned over the village, coming to rest on the largest building there, the local professor’s laboratory. He inhaled deeply, taking in the cool night air before turning to his small companion.

“Well, Pikachu, we’re back.”

“Pika!” The yellow electric mouse squeaked happily before clambering onto his favourite perch on his trainer’s shoulder. As the pair began their descent toward the sleeping town, the young man began to realise how long it had been since he had last visited the place.

‘Wow… it’s been eight years since I first left. And I haven’t been back since the Battle Frontier…’

“We’ve been on the road together for a long time, haven’t we, buddy?” The young man turned to rub his companion’s ears. “And here we are, back where we started.”

Now eighteen years of age, Ash Ketchum had returned to his hometown, Pallet Town, for a greatly anticipated vacation. He had been on the road for a long time, travelling through the newly discovered Sinnoh region, gathering Pokemon and badges along the way. He was enthusiastic when he left, eagerly looking forward to this adventure, but this did not prepare him for the challenges he would face on his newest journey.

Travelling alone had been difficult for the aspiring Pokemon master. Misty had gone back to run Cerulean City Gym after the Johto League when her sisters decided to go on an extended vacation. May had been interested in the Johto Grand Festival since Drew and Harley left for it when Ash was battling in the Battle Frontier. Max accompanied his sister in Johto, gaining his first Pokemon as he turned ten not long after their arrival on the other continent. Brock had returned to Pewter City to look after his younger brothers and sisters and resume leadership of the Pewter Gym after his father had fallen ill. Which left Ash alone, Pikachu his only companion, to travel around and collect badges from the Sinnoh league. Sure, he met people along his journey, but nothing could replace the company of his closest friends. Despite this, he smiled as he walked through the quiet streets, taking in the familiar sights.

‘I wonder how their doing? Especially Misty… I should go visit her and Brock while I’m here in Kanto…’

He hoped this vacation would refresh him and bring back his fighting spirit. The past two years had taken its toll on Ash, leaving him disinterested, depressed and lacking in confidence. The cocky, would-be Pokemon master was now a distant memory. He should have never left Kanto alone.

Norgefier-san


Norgefier-san

PostPosted: Thu Apr 30, 2009 1:05 am


Review/Comment Requests:

1. I am currently looking for a beta reader(s) for the rewritten version of this story. If you are interested in helping out, reply here or send me a PM on FF.net (preferred).

2. Basically, I'm trying to pull off a depressed Ash without him seeming too out-of-character. I realise that statement is pretty much a contradiction, but that is why I'm writing this story. I have read stories that try to depict Ash as depressed but just have him either constantly fluctuating between too-happy and bawling his eyes out, or just constantly bawling his eyes out. I'm merely trying to imagine what Ash would turn out like if he travelled alone for the whole time he was in Sinnoh, and started to lose repeatedly. I've noticed that it's his friends that continually help him through his defeats, and if he didn't have that support...
What I want to know is if I'm on the right track. Is what I'm saying and what I'm writing the same or completely different?

3. Also, am I keeping other characters like Delia, Brock and Pikachu in character?
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