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Untitled : One-shot : Horror : PG

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Sumurika

 
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PostPosted: Sat Nov 05, 2005 7:47 am


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PostPosted: Thu Mar 16, 2006 12:33 pm


I don't really know if it is allowed or you want it but, here is some crit.
Its well written, very descriptive, and you keep the flow going throughout the story but. It's a little overdone, it reminds me a little of a Goosebump book that I once read, ever heard of the series?

But overall, well done you've got some talent. biggrin

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