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 Posted: Tue Jan 18, 2005 6:01 am
Angelic demon come gouge my fears,
Make my life an eternity of tears,
Your fearful presence does beckon me near,
And makes me hear the pleas unclear,
Angelic demon come down to earth,
Make me truly your vessel of birth,
Angelic demon come gouge my fears,
Make my life an eternity of tears...
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Posted: Tue Jan 18, 2005 1:12 pm
NeoDaDevil Angelic demon come gouge my fears, Make my life an eternity of tears, Your fearful presence does beckon me near, And makes me hear the pleas unclear, Angelic demon come down to earth, Make me truly your vessel of birth, Angelic demon come gouge my fears, Make my life an eternity of tears... the rhymes seem a bit forced....
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Posted: Wed Jan 19, 2005 1:17 pm
Hm, it has an unsteady rhythm, but it makes it really interesting. I also like the 3rd and 4th lines alot for some reason... i like it!
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Posted: Fri Jan 28, 2005 6:28 am
it seems like you tried to hard to do this one. Other then that nice...
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