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Blitzbitz

PostPosted: Wed Jun 03, 2009 9:16 pm


Aidan Daray


Age: 19

Height: 5'2

Weight: 130 lbs

Sex: Female

Appearence: User Image ((Will update later with a drawing.))

Story: Born in Incul Actio. Aiden's parents were never there for her when she was younger. Everyday they would focus on making the city a better place with their inventions. They were so consumed that they never had time for her. To escape this harsh time, she would always run away from home and roam around the city.
One day, while exploring the steam city, she was involved in a potentially fatal accident. In this accident she lost her right arm (its the wrong arm in the tektek avvie) and got a large gash across her eye.
Because of the loss of her arm and her eye, she started to turn mean and harsh. Her parents tried to apologies to her and take better care of her, but it never rolled out that way. She left home armless and harsh.
At 19 she found Aura Academy and joined. now she is training with all her heart to learn how to control Aura and battle better.

Personality: Basically the school bully. Just stay out of her way, and your good. If your lucky, you might get on her goodside, but even then she might be a bit harsh on you.

Weapons: She DOES NOT HAVE a right arm. The thing on her arm is her Aura. Its a weapon aura which appears to help her on hand to hand combat. She has a time limit of three minutes on it so she has to fight fast. She's trying her best to make it last longer so she can use it as a regular arm. So far all it is, is a weapon.
She also has a blade on her, as well as a very little one hidden between her teeth.
PostPosted: Thu Jun 04, 2009 3:30 pm


Just wanted to remind you to proofread your posts to get them as clear and correct as possible. My reasoning for saying this is twofold:

1) you misspelled escape, probably because you hit the x on accident since it's right below s.

2) Incurring a fatal injury means that the person would have died. It is physically impossible to incur a "very fatal" injury and live. Potentially fatal, yes, but then there's the issue of how, where, when did she get the medical attention required to survive?

I want it clear that I'm not saying this to cut you down or anything like that, I just want to help you make sure that you're posts are written to the best of your ability and to help improve your craft. Think of it as though you're writing a serious story. Every word has to count, every phrase has to mean something in order to move the plot along and help the characters evolve.

Gary Glampire
Crew


Blitzbitz

PostPosted: Thu Jun 04, 2009 7:47 pm


Oh yeah, I always make small mistakes like that. Thank you though. I really am trying to get better at writing. thats why I'm really nervous abotu being here. He, I just hope I'm getting a bit better. Thank you. That helped alot.
PostPosted: Fri Jun 05, 2009 5:41 pm


Hey there, Blitz! Would you like me to check your character yet? 3nodding

Ebilest Hamster
Crew


Blitzbitz

PostPosted: Sat Jun 06, 2009 8:42 am


Um, Sure! That would be cool.
PostPosted: Tue Jun 09, 2009 1:52 pm


Heh, just checking 'cause of the above conversation. It's approved, my friend wink

Ebilest Hamster
Crew

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Aura Academy: Student Database (Profiles)

 
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