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The Start Of The End

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PostPosted: Sun Jun 21, 2009 10:53 pm


I'm fading.
And lifes just
A story made up
By those who want purpose,
And the ones who think they're
Justice becase no one will stop them
Cause they're scared of what might happen to
Them and their family. they dont realize that if
They open their eyes they just might have a fighting
Chance. if they won everyone would be free from
Their chains but the fear inside has taken hold and no one
Dares try and break free. they dont see clearly anymore
Their senses are dulled. But they can build a new world, if they
Only tried! But the paths are no longer clear they dont see right and wrong.
But if we'll fail once more or suceed is something only you can answer...
PostPosted: Mon Jun 22, 2009 11:48 pm


interesting...not sure if this is supposed to reflect the life of a vigilante or not. but, as always, your stuff makes you stop and think. 2 fums up! pirate

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PostPosted: Sat Jun 27, 2009 8:38 pm


Pretty cool. :3 The only thing that bothers me is that the sentences get so lengthy it sounds like prose, and that's not good for a poem.

There are also some spelling mistakes and punctuation mistakes to fix.
PostPosted: Tue Dec 29, 2009 11:32 pm


yea im not a very good speller
wow its hard to believe i wrote this almost a year ago

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