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 Posted: Thu Jan 20, 2005 8:43 pm
Red, Yellow, and Blue
They all sprout up just for you
Corporate Olimar is his name
He is the main character of this game
Uses the forces of the Pikmin population
Within the planet there is a new revolution
The Pikmin fight and carry things far off
Get in their way and the enemies should surely be knocked
For a better future for everyone
Olimar on this planet isn't just a none
Go Pikmin! Show us your might!
So that Olimar takes off again in flight!
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Posted: Sat Jan 22, 2005 5:52 pm
chrono fantasy Red, Yellow, and Blue They all sprout up just for you Corporate Olimar is his name He is the main character of this game Uses the forces of the Pikmin population Within the planet there is a new revolution The Pikmin fight and carry things far off Get in their way and the enemies should surely be knocked For a better future for everyone Olimar on this planet isn't just a none Go Pikmin! Show us your might! So that Olimar takes off again in flight! That was good an all but population doesn't rhyme with revolution, nor does off and knocked. sweatdrop
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Posted: Sat Jan 22, 2005 7:06 pm
Kane Hiroshi chrono fantasy Red, Yellow, and Blue They all sprout up just for you Corporate Olimar is his name He is the main character of this game Uses the forces of the Pikmin population Within the planet there is a new revolution The Pikmin fight and carry things far off Get in their way and the enemies should surely be knocked For a better future for everyone Olimar on this planet isn't just a none Go Pikmin! Show us your might! So that Olimar takes off again in flight! That was good an all but population doesn't rhyme with revolution, nor does off and knocked. sweatdrop There is something called a slant rhyme. Plus they don't have to rhyme in the first place. Actually rhyming poems are actually only a few compard to all of them. Sorry, I went through a poet phase about a year back.
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Posted: Tue Feb 15, 2005 1:44 pm
i'm with blueboy (blue celebi). also, i have to say that even though your poem is about a 7, your work on it showed a 10.
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Posted: Wed Feb 23, 2005 5:37 am
Thanks for the feedback and review.
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Posted: Sat Feb 26, 2005 7:12 pm
yeah, i like it. i'm not the greatest writer, but you have my attention.
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Posted: Sat Feb 26, 2005 7:23 pm
Thanks. I'm glad you like it smile
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