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PostPosted: Sat Oct 03, 2009 9:33 am


Shinigami Profile

Gaia Name:Eien101
Character Name:Eien
Character Sex:Male
Character Age:17
Height:6"0'
Weight:245
Basic Appearance:
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Personality:Has a somewhat serious attitude. Is usaully very quite and observetive. Has an second mind in his head that takes over when he is extremely wounded or angry. That person is Getsuei, he is ruthless, merciless and kills without hesitation. Getsuei is bloodthirsty and craves carnage. Getsuei exists as an sperate being within Eien's body. The two are completely different, Eien is an pacificist, who detests violence. While Getsuei cares only about himself. Getsuei is a ruthless killer.

Zanpakuto:
Zanpakuto’s Name:Ten No Tsuki(Heavenly Moon)
Zanpakuto’s Appearance:
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Release Phrase:"Hikaru(shine), Ten No Tsuki!"
Shikai Appearance:
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Shikai Abilities:
Attack 1:Shinko_hametsu(midnight destruction)-Eien throws his zanpakuto into the sky, then it dissappears into millions of tiny black spirit particles that are in the shape of needles. Ankoku can control the needles at will.
Attack 2:Akanesasusora(glowing sky)-Ankoku surrounds his entire body in spiritual particles and his body glows a bright white color he is able to move at fast speeds. He jumps into the air and charges an energy blast with his zanpakuto. Then fires it as, it get closer to the enemy it changes into the size of an basketball, but doesn't lose its power.
Attack 3:Tsukiyo(moonlit night)-Eien uses this as a last resort. He charges all the spiritual pressure into a dome that surrounds him and his opponent. While in the dome he dissappears and fires an endless arsenel of kido blasts at his opponent, from all directions, then peirces his opponent with his zanpakuto. The only drawback after this is that he is severely weakened and can not move for hours.


Bankai Name:"Fukumu waga ikikata,kuiarasu hon seikon, Ten no tsuki Joshin(embrace my way of life, devour our soul, Heavenly moon goddess)"
Bankai Appearance:Eien and his other half combine minds and form one powerful being that has been deemed the "Angel" due to his angelic appearence. They appear as an glowing entity with glowing wings and there zanpakuto transform into an long golden sword. Many in the Seireitei considers this the most beautiful bankai.
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Bankai Abilities:Eien's speed increases drastically, but in order to obtain that speed Eien gives up his healing abilities, which makes it harder to heal. Eien's strenght inreases to that of an Espada as well.
Attack 1:Ankokuseiun(dark nebula)-Eien jumps into the sky and throws his zanpakuto directly in front of him. He begans concentrating his pressure at his zanpakuto, suddenly it begans to glow a black color and disperses into black particles that will explode on contact. Can control where the particles move.
Attack 2:Karite gappei(reaper fusion)- Eien eyes glow blood red and he transforms into an being that has no emotion and bloodthirsty. This transformation is caused by tapping into the evil within his heart. While in this form Eien's strenght, speed and power increases. But, using this is very risky, everytime he uses this move his life is shortens by 25yrs. It also causes stress on his heart and body which will eventuall fail and he will collapse from exshaution.
Attack 3:Akatsukiyami(moonless dawn)-Eien's strongest attack. He absorbs all the reaitsu surrounding his and his opponent body into one giant black sphere wich he thens throws into the sky. All of a sudden one part of the sphere explodes and millions of kido blast rains down on his opponent. While the kido rains down the second part of the sphere condenses into an extremely powerful sphere of reiatsu, that attacks his opponenet head on. The sphere has enough power to destroy half of the Sereitei.

Other Abilities:Eien is a master strageist and taction. He is also a master of stealth.
PostPosted: Sun Oct 04, 2009 9:19 am


As muck as I like surprises I would like it if you gave ether myself or Jouju some information about your bankai (Weakness/strength). This way you can still keep it secret in a way and the two admin can know about it to lower the possibilities for changing them. Unless your character has no bankai?

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PostPosted: Sun Oct 04, 2009 9:25 am


A little lacking in detail across the entire profile. My suggestion, if you wish to have a detailed and solid character, is to describe everything in huge detail, without rambling of course.

Other wise, character personality seems a little bland in creativity, shikai attacks are lacking in actual damage and effect details, as well as overall shikai detai. Bankai is severely lacking and should be presented for record purposes. Other abilites sems pretty basic and lacks detail.

Overall, I would decline this profile, however, it's not my decision.
PostPosted: Sun Oct 04, 2009 11:48 am


I agree, your Shikai is just a rip off.
Especially the 3rd attack.

And you need to create your Bankai.


I To be honest would suggest you completely recreate your Shikai.
Change all the attacks and the ability.

DECLINED.

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PostPosted: Mon Oct 05, 2009 8:50 pm


Weakness: Isn;t really an defensive type; has no defense at all. There is a one minute interval after each attack. This is because of how much time it take to charge up one attack. Weak against fire types.
PostPosted: Mon Oct 05, 2009 8:54 pm


If you think about it, all Shinigami are demi-gods, so perhaps you need to rephrase your power level.

Not quite sure though. I think it could use more detail but that's how I am.

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PostPosted: Wed Oct 07, 2009 6:54 pm


So is this good enough?
PostPosted: Sun Oct 11, 2009 5:05 pm


Approved!

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