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MissAnnathropy

PostPosted: Wed Oct 14, 2009 4:29 pm


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PostPosted: Wed Oct 14, 2009 4:50 pm


look at this quick poem

Do you see how I am now?
Do you think i like this?
Well i don't! My heart is in pieces and there's no one here that can help me!
I'm all alone in the darkness.. crying my eyes out and no one cares...
No one can save my soul from this Darkness of Pain and Misery...
My soul was taken long ago.. so was my heart which none... Heartless and Soulless...
I have nothing now because of you.
Do you see what you made me into? Are you happy now?
MY LIFE IS OVER NOW BECAUSE OF YOUR SELFISHNESS!!!


I need a name for this

Desu ls Delicious


MissAnnathropy

PostPosted: Fri Oct 16, 2009 4:53 pm


Pieces
PostPosted: Fri Oct 16, 2009 4:54 pm


^ thats the name that I suggest
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MissAnnathropy


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PostPosted: Fri Oct 16, 2009 5:15 pm


Wow, this is a very interesting poem. Very well written!

I love the imagery of:

Quote:
She took out a paint brush and swept them off floor
And put them in a jar.


I also like the repetition of:

Quote:
It made her feel powerful
It made her feel strong
It made her feel liked she belonged…


Wonderful job!
PostPosted: Fri Oct 16, 2009 5:17 pm


Anju Taniyama
look at this quick poem

Do you see how I am now?
Do you think i like this?
Well i don't! My heart is in pieces and there's no one here that can help me!
I'm all alone in the darkness.. crying my eyes out and no one cares...
No one can save my soul from this Darkness of Pain and Misery...
My soul was taken long ago.. so was my heart which none... Heartless and Soulless...
I have nothing now because of you.
Do you see what you made me into? Are you happy now?
MY LIFE IS OVER NOW BECAUSE OF YOUR SELFISHNESS!!!


I need a name for this

In the future, please post your own thread instead of posting something like this in someone else's thread where they do not ask you to post your own poems...It's disrespectful, especially since you didn't ask for permission from the OP (original poster) to take a look at your poem. You also didn't give any feedback on the OP's poem.

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MissAnnathropy

PostPosted: Fri Oct 16, 2009 11:54 pm


Thanks Agorphia, I really like this poem...I wrote it one day at lunch when I was feeling in a somewhat depressed mood and writing always makes me feel better biggrin
PostPosted: Sat Oct 17, 2009 7:36 pm


I'm the same way; I feel better after writing something to get my feelings out. xD That's how creative writing started, probably!

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