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Love is Shame

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Dragons Willow

PostPosted: Fri Oct 16, 2009 12:09 am


sweatdrop been awhile since i posted here. but here goes!

i think this poem and its intensity will speak for itself. please note that all punctuation, or lack thereof, has been done on purpose for the sake of delivery and/or emotion of the poem. thanks!

i'd still love to hear from whoever reads it tho, so please leave a comment and tell me what you think of it, how it makes you feel.

READ ON!




"Love is Shame"


i'll cry because i want to

and you cant stop the tears

i'll cry because its all i can do

to stave away my fears

rejection

acceptance

there's just no predicting

the reason my heart's ticking

i know that its just me

who frolics in hopeless fantasy

but why should i be left to dream?

i'll just build it up into a frenzy

and with a horrific blow be torn down

i think my love for you is growing-

no! i can't think that! i'm so wrong...

i'm so wrong...

just a friend, a friend, friend....

that's all

no more

no less

but...

i wish more...so much more...

but...but...

i tear and sigh

and sigh some more

i want to tell so badly

what i feel

but your so far

i want you near

but now's not the time

i can tell

there's school and work and life...

life....it seems so dull

but lights me up when you are near...

i'm crying again

crying again

again....

i cant seem to stop

but i will

for you, i will

until you say so first

i won't say a word...


~END~
PostPosted: Fri Oct 16, 2009 5:05 pm


Really feel a connection to this poem

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PostPosted: Fri Oct 16, 2009 5:13 pm


I think this is a poem almost anybody can relate to.
Great use of diction. You use some very good words like "stave" and "frolics."

I'm not sure what line number this is but in this line you use the wrong your:

Quote:
but your so far


Just change it to "you're" and it's fixed. :3

Great poem!
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