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Love Toxic Kisses

PostPosted: Sun Oct 18, 2009 10:51 am


i live

i laugh
i cry

i listen
i fear

i sing
i write

i enjoy
i disagree

i know
i am human

even though we
harm others for

no reason i
will live to know

what happens when
i die and

to know why
we can't fly

why we can't
breathe under water

why we can
talk and animals

can't why we
can't always be

the better person
why we can't

just agree to
disagree

yet i know
that the longing

we feel won't
always be there

and i know
that people will

ask how does
a kid know

that?
and we're just

gonna smile and
say you'll never know  
PostPosted: Wed Oct 21, 2009 3:16 pm


Very intriguing!

I especially like your line breaks of this couplet:

Quote:
can't why we
can't always be


I like how you break the lines so both lines start with "can't."

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zeula

PostPosted: Fri Oct 23, 2009 8:40 pm


Interesting idea. I think it needs some beautiful imagery to go with such a wonderful idea.
PostPosted: Mon Oct 26, 2009 5:16 pm


ok

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