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 Posted: Wed Nov 04, 2009 7:20 pm
Go to sleep,
Go to sleep,
Until the morning light
For when you awaken
There will be no cruel night.
So go to sleep,
Go to sleep,
Then this world will be no more,
Then you will be free to
Fly to a distant shore.
Soar with me,
Soar with me,
On this night
For in that world
There is only light.
So soar with me,
Soar with me,
To that far off land
We'll visit a king's castle,
The ball will be so grand.
So soar with me,
Soar with me,
To that distant shore,
Though when you awaken
That shore will be no more.
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Posted: Tue Nov 10, 2009 7:08 pm
(Sorry I'm getting back to this soo late)
I like it.
It has some flow to it.
Though just the way the poem is set up, I feel like your last two stanzas should start with something besides with soar with me because that's how your first 4 stanzas worked.
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