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 Posted: Thu Nov 05, 2009 8:58 am
Um.... How can i say this? i have been wanting to start one of these for some time but im not sure if ppl would like it so i will just give u the first chapter how does that sound and if its good leave a post to tell me or a comment on my profile!
Chapter 1
Every person has a story to tell. So listen carfully and listen to mine. My name is Suki Mizki and im just a normal 15 yr old girl. Right intill my mom came back to find me. My father was just as normal as me working at a pizza shop and paying the bills. But how could we have know that my mother was unhuman. but really this is just wried
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Posted: Wed Jan 13, 2010 1:11 pm
It's a good start, but you could have written a whole lot more. People don't know if this would become a good story.
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Posted: Wed Jan 13, 2010 2:08 pm
I agree it's a good start but be more descriptive when telling a story.
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Posted: Wed Jan 13, 2010 2:56 pm
it isn't very captivating that i would want to finish the story.
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Posted: Wed Jan 13, 2010 5:05 pm
sorry about that but i was at school doin that and the teacher saw me......and well it didnt go good i will finish it soon
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Posted: Wed Jan 13, 2010 10:36 pm
It sounds pretty interrting, just be sure to use loads and loads of discriptive words, ppl mostly swoon over stuff like that, plus it gives a certain atmosphere to your story. Goodluck! Keep up the writing! mrgreen
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Posted: Thu Feb 11, 2010 8:10 pm
i deffently like the begining. try to keep going with it for sure smile
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