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 Posted: Fri Nov 13, 2009 2:07 pm
As your world crashes around you
I will laugh
Nothing gonna change my world
You tried though
Locked me up in dark places
Without the sun...
Love...
Hope.
You locked me up for a long time
Time to think
Time to plot
The day you opened the door was coming
Did you expect it?
Me jumping?
Attacking
You made me the animal
My life was withered away
To one fact
I had to destroy you
Even if that meant destroying myself
And as you die
I will be set free
For you see,
You locked me up.
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Posted: Sat Nov 14, 2009 6:40 pm
I think you meant "Nothing's gonna change my world". I'm not sure I understand entirely what your poem's about, but I think sometimes it's okay to be lost in the mystery of the words. Nice job!
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Posted: Sat Nov 14, 2009 8:59 pm
I feel like I was understanding something of what your poem was about, but I don't see how the third line fits in with the poem (nothing . . .)
but I agree with midnight. Sometimes it's good to be lost in the mystery.
Keep up the good work
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Posted: Mon Nov 23, 2009 8:31 pm
Aw thank you so much, mostly its just my emotions flowing onto the page more or less and thank you thank you for the critics
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