My Steampunk Story (In Progress)

[AmadeoAlgeddon]

"Those who revel in the brilliance of the Sun,"

Here is a story I'm working on right now. This link should lead you to my journal, so if it doesn't, please tell me, or just go to my profile to view it. Access is currently set to Friends only, and won't be revealed to the public until I get in a few more entries, but I'm just starting out here. This isn't my first time writing a story, but It will be the first time I've done a story as long as this one is going to be. Hopefully you all will enjoy it those who can view it, and for those of you who can't, fear not! For as I said above, I will reveal it to the public eventually.

My Steampunk Story (In Progress)



((EDIT: Rated MA for: Mature Audiences, but is not restricted to such. It has slightly mature scenes such as, and should not be viewed by anyone easily offended by, violence or blood, like children under the age of 15. This is only a precaution, for not everyone likes said subjects, and you have now been forewarned. Again, it is only minor, and not excessive or explicit, and well within the Gaia TOS, as I have even read through it just recently. Thank you for your time.))
((EDIT2: Journals are open to friends again. I fear someone may actually take my story and claim it as their own, for already have had someone claim one of my pictures was theirs. A pain, but I have removed said pictures from Gaia now, and hope the clamor will die down soon. Sorry for any inconveniences.))

Those who read my story, please feel free to comment I don't mind what other people have to say about it, unless it is a really negative and harsh comment! Constructive criticism and suggestions only, if you'd please!

"Should take time to dance under the Moon"

 

[AmadeoAlgeddon]

Chapter 2 now open for viewing! And the rating has been only slightly modified for content purposes that happen to be taking place in latter entries. You will see it in RED in the post above if you haven't noticed it yet. All other updates will be posted right here, in this box for anyone who is interested in viewing my progress. Also I might add that I am NOT a professional writer. And I don't plan on becoming one either, so please don't be too harsh on me if you notice something wrong. Thanks again for reading along, and I do appreciate comments from anyone who does enjoy what I'm writing. The story hasn't yet hit the actual steampunk mark yet, but I'm working on it. I already have put in a few tiny details that are steampunk related, so keep an eye out for those if you can, and remember, it will get better from here. I hope....  

[AmadeoAlgeddon]

Lol, well don't go dying on me now! I will have more, and kinda sorry about the suspense. I fear if I try too hard to end a story without suspense..... Well, I don't know. It is a partial tactic I suppose to keep readers coming, but I also haven't been able to end a chapter without messing something up otherwise. So until I can, this is what you get. So, is anyone other than Galvad reading this? Or are we alone in this? Please comment if you are reading along with us!
By the way, you don't think that the second chapter was way too long do you? I tried to shorten it, but I didn't want to take out any of the important details, and it would be sort of pointless to continue another chapter that is still basically the same exact thing as the last, only continued from previous.