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 Posted: Sat Jan 23, 2010 11:36 am
Jack-In-The-Box
I am as a Jack-In-The-Box
Sitting all alone
As people pass by every day
Taking little notice of me.
Once in a while someone comes along
And picks me up.
Some just simply look me over
Others have me play my tune.
Once or thrice they hear me out
And i reluctantly come out of my box.
Only to be shoved back in again
And my box sealed right back up
So that no light shines in.
Though much time has passed
I still have hope
For you to come along,
Whoever you may be.
To hear my tune and think it well
And get to know the real me.
To free me of my plain old box
And to face the the world with you.
Until that day does come along
I sit and play my tune.
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Posted: Tue Jan 26, 2010 8:55 am
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Posted: Sun Jan 31, 2010 8:55 am
well, this is depressing (._.)
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Posted: Mon Feb 01, 2010 11:09 am
I really like this poem. It really gives a good insight on the emotions a jack-in-the-box might feel. I think it's very well written. It's not too short, but it's not too long that it bores the reader with its length.
P.S. Don't feel bad if people don't reply right away. This guild has really slowed down, as of late, and so people don't check it as often as they should. Don't take it personally.
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Posted: Mon Feb 01, 2010 12:07 pm
thanks for the opinion and the advice smile
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Posted: Tue Feb 02, 2010 10:18 am
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Posted: Fri Feb 19, 2010 8:46 pm
I love it! You are so right!!!
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Posted: Wed Oct 13, 2010 6:32 pm
hi.... i like it..... it is really welll written and i love the way you made it come to life.... *tear*.... lol (at my stupid human)... i really like it
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Posted: Thu Oct 14, 2010 7:31 pm
crying thank you all so much mrgreen i worked hard on it the night i wrote it =J
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Posted: Fri Oct 15, 2010 6:25 pm
hey since you guys liked that poem ill give ya this one too =) this one is a bit more depressing and i think i wrote it after i watched the movie The Invisible.
The Ghost
I am a ghost amongst the living.
I pass through these halls every day
and no one talks, no one notices, no one sees.
Am I live or am I dead? I can't tell.
Does anyone see me passing by?
Would anyone hear me if I cried?
I am an invisible phantom.
I see the living pass on by.
I hear the lonely girl when she cries.
I sit in my seat, I walk in the hall,
Yet no one looks my way,
acknowledges my existence.
Did I die and not remember?
I still haunt the halls filled with those
Who cannot see me,
Who do not hear me,
Who don't even know I'm here.
But I am.
-K.L.S.M.
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Posted: Sat Oct 16, 2010 9:51 am
crying
that was sad.... in a good way.......... people acutally feel that way and my school
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Posted: Sun Oct 17, 2010 9:09 am
i don't think anyone knows how they feel but me
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Posted: Sun Oct 17, 2010 6:55 pm
even the best of us feel that way sometimes :l
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Posted: Tue Oct 19, 2010 8:14 am
Oh, I like them. Especially the jack-in-the-box one. I'd never thought about what it would be like to be one. It must be terribly boring.
And I'll contribute this Halloween-y thing:
Cut open my head and eat my insides.
Ruin my face, carve out my eyes.
Set me on fire until my life is over.
Oh, to be a pumpkin when it is October...
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Posted: Tue Oct 19, 2010 1:20 pm
The Dancing Leaves
the small, crisped leaves skitter around possessed by the wind
each leaf dances to and fro,
with every single wind blow
brown, gold, orange & red,
each dancer bows their head
skitter scatter here and there,
color is blown everywhere
-K.L.S.M.
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