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 Posted: Tue Jan 26, 2010 6:18 am
Hey guys, yes I have another song for you. I'm on fire with my songwriting again, as my friend Keely once said to me "I vomit songs like someone with food poisoning." Not the nicest analogy but very true. I hope you guys like it
BUTTERFLY
You hold me but I’m fallin’
You kiss me but I’m stallin’
On the inside
I went to scream about it
But nothing can get through
The walls surrounding me
Coz I’m crazy
Coz I’m ******** up
And I don’t know what to do
Coz I’m insane
And I’m losing
All I want is you
But I need to find a way
To make you see
That you are all I have
Will you please set me free?
In the shelter of the lost
In the shelter of the broken
Screaming for you
All the criticism
All memories I’ve forgotten
They cannot be replaced
Coz I’m crazy
Coz I’m ******** up
And I don’t know what to do
Coz I’m insane
And I’m losing
All I want is you
But I need to find a way
To make you see
That you are all I have
Will you please set me free?
And as you follow me outside
See me looking at the sky
You are wondering why
They don’t call me a butterfly
But I told you
That I’m crazy
That I’m ******** up
And I don’t know what to do
That I’m insane
And I’m losing
All I want is you
But I need to find a way
To make you see
That you are all I have
Will you please set me free?
Coz I’m crazy
Coz I’m ******** up
And I don’t know what to do
Coz I’m insane
And I’m losing
All I want is you
But I need to find a way
To make you see
That you are all I have
Will you please set me free?
Set me free
Leave me be
Let me go to the sky
While you’re wondering why
I only let you call me
A butterfly
So let me know what you guys think and as always, constructive criticism would be epic and greatly appreciated. Thanks for reading <3
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Posted: Wed Jan 27, 2010 1:06 pm
It was very interesting.
I was a little confused about why your "main character" was considering themself a butterfly, but I think it makes more sense now that I've read the entire thing.
I really wish I could hear it to music, I'm sure it will be epic blaugh
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Posted: Wed Jan 27, 2010 6:51 pm
Kasi Karra It was very interesting. I was a little confused about why your "main character" was considering themself a butterfly, but I think it makes more sense now that I've read the entire thing. I really wish I could hear it to music, I'm sure it will be epic blaugh Yeah, it'll be epic when I have the inspiration and the time to finish it. I've got an awesome introduction but I don't know what to do with it afterwards... Oh well, I'm sure I'll figure out something eventually ^L^ Thanks again heart CBL
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Posted: Wed Jan 27, 2010 6:56 pm
Xconsumed_by_loveX Kasi Karra It was very interesting. I was a little confused about why your "main character" was considering themself a butterfly, but I think it makes more sense now that I've read the entire thing. I really wish I could hear it to music, I'm sure it will be epic blaugh Yeah, it'll be epic when I have the inspiration and the time to finish it. I've got an awesome introduction but I don't know what to do with it afterwards... Oh well, I'm sure I'll figure out something eventually ^L^ Thanks again heart CBL Only time will tell. (And when I hear it on the radio I'll jump up and down and start screaming with everyone staring at me funny lol )
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