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 Posted: Tue Dec 27, 2005 8:36 pm
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Posted: Sat Dec 31, 2005 2:14 pm
It's very interesting and a good b eginning! I really would like to read more!
One thing I noticed though is that at the beginning I couldn't tell if Oliver was the king or not from how it was written... if that was changed it would make the piece a lot better!
Good job!
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Posted: Sat Dec 31, 2005 3:19 pm
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Posted: Fri Jan 20, 2006 2:17 pm
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Posted: Thu Apr 20, 2006 3:05 pm
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