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Wow, that was one of the best poems I have read in quite awhile (and that's saying something considering I read poetry for a school magazine). My only complaint is that the third section rhythm was a tad bit unsteady, however, not so much that it ruined the poem.
I liked it alot! Especially the ending- that made shivers run down my spine (yes, that is a good thing). Keep up the good work!

I like the poem overall, but there is so much that you could improve on! While I was reading, I had to pause at times because the flow wasn't quite right. A few more syllables here, maybe one less there. Your second line for example. Add an adjective/adverb about the frame or the word prison, and it should flow better. "Nor whom they did meet" need another syllable also. I was thinking "Nor whom they once did meet" to give a more past tense feel.

I absolutely adore the third stanza. I love it. It's a major bright spot in the poem. But once again, the flow could have been better. Adding a conjunction would help, I think. Maybe "History has forgotten him/ And her beauty is lost in time" Other than that this stanza is beautifully done.

The fourth stanza is a bit awkward. You sound like you were having trouble with it. The first line can be rearranged/reworded to fit better while still keeping "tell" on the end. "Their person" isn't the best phrase to use in the next line, and it also needs more syllables. "Their selves long lost in age". In the next line, "all have" is really the main bump. And I think the last line can improve with the others, you just need to adjust it after you fix the first three. ^^

"Thousand" should be "thousands". I'm sure that's a typo. Another conjunction can be used to flow into the next line. Ah! I love it. All you need is "For" at the beginning of the last line to make the flow go along, and it'll be perfect! heart Love it, love it, love it!!!

I think the poems are fine the way they are. I hope you don't change things just because others said they need to be changed. Your perfection may not be the perfection of others so go with your vision, not theirs.

I like it a lot, but the rhyming does need a little work. Other than that I think it's just great.