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Kleopatra Selene Vice Captain
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 Posted: Thu Jul 01, 2010 10:07 pm
Wow, people, there's been a lot of effort made...I'm so proud of the work I've been reading over! Whether the poems did or didn't rhyme, they were all really good. However, the Poetry sub-forum just isn't getting a lot of attention. Therefore, I think I will start posting more poetry and encouraging you to do the same! Here are a couple of my poems that I've already posted in a few contests in other guilds but I think would be good to post here, too:
Mask of Sadness
You’ve been deceived, my love
Didn’t you have it made?
I feel like my heart’s been broken
And our love will slowly fade.
But don’t you remember the good times
When we promised to make it through?
Don’t you remember
The first time we said, “I love you?”
Do you remember our first “hello”,
Or even our first kiss?
Do you remember thinking,
Did Adam need Eve like this?
You never have to remember
What you’ll never forget
So why is it that you’d love it
If we’d never met?
I’ve got nothing left to say
Except we’ll each slowly fade away
Without each other, everything is gone
And we’re just someone else’s pawn.
Our perfect love used to work all on its own
Now you’re halfway out the door
And now I feel like I’m on my own, all alone
What used to be love is now just décor.
Do you remember our first “hello”,
Or even our first kiss?
Do you remember thinking,
Did Adam need Eve like this?
My desperation’s slowing leaving
My heart is slowly healing
This mask of sadness on my face is slowly peeling
Never thought of God before, but I’m slowly believing
You’re the one who’s been deceiving
Your heart was what I wanted, but you’ve been bereaving.
I realized that life just might be possible
With or without you
I hope you live a long life
To live alone, I really do.
Feelings You Never Knew
A fool I was to trust you
A decision based on heart alone
I decision that I now regret
But I haven’t let go yet
Because then I’ll be on my own.
You chose to break my heart
Now it’s torn
This is a burden you’ve yet to enlighten
This is a noose you’ve yet to tighten
This is a suffering I have long borne.
Now I feel the slow encircling
Of a hatred centered towards you
Do you feel the hatred seeping
In, do you feel my weeping
For memories and feelings you never knew?
A man once told me that love conquers all
Well, I am no conquistador
And nor are you
I bid all of our love adieu
As you did when I asked for more.
Forget that my eyes are closing
Forget that my heart is breaking
Feel my suffering in the air
I feel that you have yet to care
Don’t you see the toll this is taking?
I’m lost without you
Lost in a maze of sadness
I’m in a maze, I’m lost still yet
This is something for which I fret
Which you refuse to address.
You bring back memories of a first “hello”
And of a first, cherished kiss
’Twas you I used to adore
’Twas you to which I gave my heart and more
Did Adam ever need Eve like this?
My pain is here
But salvation is ’nigh
’Twas your lies that kept me here
But now I refuse to fear
You, and I shall defy.
This brings back memories
Remember our last, cherished kiss?
It makes me think
What caused our false bond, our link?
Did Adam ever need Eve like this?
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Posted: Thu Jul 01, 2010 10:10 pm
Before anyone can ask me about this, in both of the poems above I put in a line that said: "Did Adam ever need Eve like this?" I'm sorry, but I refuse to change my poems. I was struck by a picture of Adam and Eve sharing a tender kiss (which I saw on some website whose name I can't remember) and I accidentally put the line in both of them. Sorry! But, oh well.
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Kleopatra Selene Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Jul 19, 2010 5:44 pm
No, i like them.
i was surprised at how long they were,
since usually i read short ones.
but i like them.
How, may i ask, do you
begin to write a poem,
how do you come up with an idea?
if you don't mind my asking.
i really want to write a poem,
and i know i can,
i just always, no matter the topic,
have trouble starting.
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Posted: Mon Jul 19, 2010 8:39 pm
To be honest? Sometimes I don't write the beginning. Sometimes only a few lines of it come to me. Then, I have to build up on it. Do you know what kind of poem you want? Haiku, limerick, or even a free verse or blank verse? If you do, that helps.
For example, sometimes I restrict some of my stanzas to only about, say, ten or fifteen lines. I use that to give me an idea of what I can write and how much I can write in it.
Also: your topic. Topic matters. If you really feel a passion for it--whether it's for your car, your ex, or your great-uncle's funeral eulogy--then it should come to you, whether it's easy or not. Sometimes songs inspire me--the topics, not the lyrics. If I really understand what it says--if it speaks to me, and I think it's a nice topic--then it will eventually become a poem you like. Of course, it may be hard to write your poems--who doesn't have at least one poem that they can't write easily--but why bother putting it off? You should express your emotions and let out your passions with every word that you've penned down.
This is the only advice I can give you. I hope it helps.
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Kleopatra Selene Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Jul 19, 2010 10:29 pm
yah see I wrote a poem for my sister and that's what I did let it come to me from the heart
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Posted: Mon Sep 20, 2010 3:44 pm
That's what you have to do. You have to let it come from the heart. Especially if it's for your great-uncle's funeral eulogy (see above post to understand.) Anyway, I've got one poem to give you guys! Feel lucky, LOL!
(I will admit, the title was inspired by "One Less Bell To Answer", but that is all!)
One Last Kiss To Share
One last kiss to share
One last gasp for air
Now I'm quietly breathing
Waiting for my demise...
Because now I see
It began by loo-oo-king in your eyes...
Your touch was so soothing
Your eyes were so cooling
Still, you lit me up in a passionate flame
Soon it grew out of control
A wildfire, caused by love no more
And it has yet to be tamed.
And how am I supposed to live
When everything you wanted, I willingly give?
And you wanted everything
Except for me to accept that diamond ring
You never did ever give.
I'm sitting here sobbing
The mafia rang on the doorbell of my heart
It's slowly tearing me apart
Because of their infinite mobbing.
Infinite
I used to describe you as it
But no more
My love, my love, don't ask me
What my sacrifice was for
Tis you I love no more
One last kiss to share
One last gasp for air
Tis you I lo-o-ve no-o more!
((I think it could a song, too. And if you copy this, I WILL KILL YOU! (Russian accented hiss....) Anyway, hope you liked it!))
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Kleopatra Selene Vice Captain
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