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 Posted: Wed Aug 25, 2010 12:26 am
Last night, I keep getting this line in my head while listening to a J-POP song Last train which talking about moving away from the old and want to start a new live. The translation even said I don't wanna be a slave and I never wanna be a slave. *gulp*
Anyway the line was 'you're the one I love" and it developed into a song (which of course can take a 2-4hrs but for me about 20-30min) with the tune which was playing (stupid move since now I have to find someone to compose a tune for it).
Anyway, here's the song called I'm the one You love.
Vs.1
As I look back at my life today,
I can see what I have acomplished along the way.
I know that You were by my side,
I don't know why but I can feel Your strength,
pre chorus 1
You have been there all along, through the good and bad times.
You knew that I will struggle day by day, but You always pick me up.
Chorus
You're the one who gave me power to change the world today.
I never forget the day that I saw Your face.
I know that You have a certain plan that You layed out for me.
'Cause I'm the one You love.
Vs. 2
Sometimes I do feel that I'm afraid of obstacles that stands in my way.
But You help me though thick and thin and together we will win again.
Pre Chorus 2
But through the darkness I can see Your face.
Now I know there is a way.
I'm equipped with Your sheild and sword so the battle will be won.
Chorus
You're the one who gave me power to change the world today.
I never forget the day that I saw Your face.
I know that You have a certain plan that You layed out for me,
'Cause I'm the one You love.
Middle 8
When I pass away and wait at Your gates.
You welcome me with Your open arms but I know this.
I have a long way to go and I'm motivated.
Chorus
You're the one who gave me power to change the world today.
I never forget the day that I saw Your face.
I know that You have a certain plan that You layed out for me,
'Cause I'm the one You love.
This is because You're the one who gave me power to change the world today.
I never forget the day that I saw Your face.
I know that You have a certain plan that You layed out for me
'Cause I'm the one You love.
'Cause I'm the one You love.
And that came out of NOWHERE!!!!
What should I do with it? Should I change the lyrics? What needs a bit of work? Should I pass it on to someone else to have a look at it? I really need your help on this.
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Posted: Wed Aug 25, 2010 3:48 am
Saay.. Gurl! you have talent! ^^
Umm... don't pass it to someone else yet...
If it came out of nowhere...
It might have a message...
I just think... it may have something.
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Posted: Wed Aug 25, 2010 1:03 pm
I have talent for songwriting??? sweatdrop
EDIT: here is the translation of the J-POP song.
Last Train
Today's the day to carry out a plan.
I'll finally escape from my saturated life today
I don't know what is going on today
But somehow I feel that my answer isn't here
Though I don't know how my life will end,
I never want to be a slave
'Cause there is always the chance to change
I guess it's up to you
I'm trying to be a better person
I will get one the train
I don't wanna become a slave
I will live for myself
I'm trying to be another me
'Cause I won't loose my life
My life will succeed
I'll reach my goal
I try to smile but I can't remember how
I don't know
please tell me how'd I become so Jaded?
Sometimes I feel like I might be dead soon
But I know that it gave me something to believe
Though I don't know how my life will end,
I never want to be a slave
'Cause there is always the chance to change
I guess it's up to you
I'm trying to be a better person
I will get one the train
I don't wanna become a slave
I will live for myself
I'm trying to be another me
'Cause I won't loose my life
My life will succeed
I'll reach my goal
It's time to say goodbye
I'm not afraid of you
I need to walk away
'Cause I don't wanna to be a liar
If I can'not live my life,
I am good as dead.
I'm trying to be a better person
I will get one the train
I don't wanna become a slave
I will live for myself
I'm trying to be another me
'Cause I won't loose my life
My life will succeed
I'll reach my goal
My life will succeed I'll reach my goal
I'm trying to be a better person
janime.info
I put the lyrics in bold which jumped out at me but I don't want to have the same lyrics highlighted over and over again.
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Posted: Thu Aug 26, 2010 3:55 am
Ok.. I DO love writing... more specific.. Im a little bit good in composing...*sigh*
You can make it into a song or a poem inspired by God or anything that inspires you? ^^
well, You can dedicate that song... or Poem for your parents for
their b-day... But I believe you'll have to re-arrange the poem tho.
First... what do YOU want to do with it?
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Posted: Thu Aug 26, 2010 2:31 pm
you shouldnt post something like that online, It could get stolen.
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Posted: Thu Aug 26, 2010 3:03 pm
Well, I want to pass it to Parachute Music to see what they think and might get some music composed if I'm lucky. That way I can get some pointers.
And I do have the copy of the song on the computer. One of the main reasons that I want to have it copywrited. But it will take AGES to do so. I don't mind waiting.
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Posted: Sun Aug 29, 2010 1:53 am
UPDATE!!!!
I'm going over with a friend of mine to sort out the grammer and spelling side of things and going to send it to Parachute Music by end of the week.
And hopefully, asking one of the team leaders to delete this thread too.
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