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PostPosted: Tue Jan 17, 2006 3:30 pm


My House of Pain

Step inside my house of pain,
No one here is truly sane.
Blood and urine foul these plaster walls,
shrill screams of despair echo down these halls.

Perhaps its all an illusion, perhaps I'm fake.
But is that a chance you're willing to take?
A knife is my weapon of choice if you must know.
I start from the head and slowly work towards the toes.

The pungent aroma of fear is so divine.
Don't worry precious everything will be fine!
A hallow ahce resides deep inside,
And it's my illness that I shall hide.

My wit and charm are sure to get me far.
And when it's all over I'll stuff you into the trunk of my car.
For three long days you'll be sentenced to hell.
And then when it's all completed it'll be your organs I'll sell.

So please m'dear don't shed a single tear.
For sooner or later we all have to face that which we truly fear..
PostPosted: Tue Jan 17, 2006 6:19 pm


Oh god... that's so... disturbing yet it has such fantastic rhymes....

lunar_beam


TimeTheTea

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PostPosted: Mon Jan 30, 2006 8:10 am


wow, the poem is fantastic! the rhymes and the theme is a certain *three thumbs up*
PostPosted: Sun Feb 05, 2006 6:34 pm


I'll get back to you in a second... So many disturbing images...



*cough*


... Strong, literate poetry (the "ahce" thing is fixable, and I'm assuming a typo) and very strong imagery. Captures the theme well.

al_batross

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