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 Posted: Wed Jan 18, 2006 5:28 pm
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Posted: Sun Jan 22, 2006 10:27 pm
This is a very interesting beginning to your story. Besides a few grammatical errors it was very well written. Oh, and for the Virgin Mary, if you're referring to the Biblical one, it's not Merry. If you meant to spell it that way, then feel free to ignore me. xp
The only part which was a bit unrealistic was the description of the child for some reason. It seemed lacking in something, though I'm not sure what.
Overall, it was very good and created a very good intro. I can't wait to read more!
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Posted: Mon Jan 23, 2006 3:04 pm
Cereah This is a very interesting beginning to your story. Besides a few grammatical errors it was very well written. Oh, and for the Virgin Mary, if you're referring to the Biblical one, it's not Merry. If you meant to spell it that way, then feel free to ignore me. xp The only part which was a bit unrealistic was the description of the child for some reason. It seemed lacking in something, though I'm not sure what. Overall, it was very good and created a very good intro. I can't wait to read more! Thanks very much for your review. ^^ Will fix up my mistake straight away. Hopfully I'll get more out soon... my muse still isn't letting me write any of the story. *Sighs* Oh well. At least she let me write something. ^^
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