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PostPosted: Fri Oct 15, 2010 11:27 am


Okay I'm starting off another story now, just because the idea popped into my head after watching an episode of Doctor Who ( rofl ) Anyway, this one's about Goku after the events in GT. Probably going to be a short one, don't know yet. But anyway, here's chapter one! biggrin

I don't think it's that good... Give us tips on how to make it better yeah. Plus ideas on how to continue the story, and give us ideas on my other story 'The Loneliness of a True King' about Bardock as well!

P.S Yeah I know all my stories so far have got the word 'LONELY' in it, but hey I'm just good at that stuff *Shrugs shoulders*, anyway, I'll just shut up and post it.

Oh and by the way, I really haven't written anything like this before... Kinda weird for me... Don't hate us if you don't like it confused
PostPosted: Fri Oct 15, 2010 11:29 am


Chapter one: His princess


Ever felt guilty for falling in love again? Felt like you were cheating on a past partner even though in reality you weren’t? Well that’s how Son Goku was feeling. About 20 years had passed since his last battle on Earth, where he had achieved Super Saiyan 4, and fought Omega Shenron with his reliable ally and fellow Saiyan Vegeta. He was 30 years old physically right now, and was madly in love with a young woman, only at the age of 19. The moment they met they felt a connection between them, something always drawing them closer together. That was only 3 months ago…

As he held her tightly, watching her as she breathed in and out, sound asleep, he reminisced on the days on Planet Earth, where his family and friends still resided. He couldn’t face them again, especially now that he was with another woman. He ran a hand through her hair gently, and then down her cheek, running his thumb across it gently. Her soft skin and dark eyes would remind him of Chichi, which probably brought on even more guilt onto him. He would wonder if it was best to just disappear one day, never come back to this planet, just make it like he was killed somewhere… But then thought could he really do that to her? Could he really leave her after she had just announced to him the night before that she loved him. He knew he loved her; it was blindly obvious to him that he was head over heels in love with her. She was the first person to make him smile in ages, and he missed the feeling of sleeping in someone’s arms. Not just anyone’s arms… But someone who actually cared about him, and made him feel safe. He would always call himself pathetic for falling so hard for someone this fast, but he never really experienced love properly, not until he met her. Evil as it may seem, but it was true. He cared for Chichi tremendously, but never really understood love. This love feeling took over his entire body as soon as he saw her, after he landed on this planet. He would also occasionally wonder if him being turned into a child was a blessing, because it practically lead him to her.
“Oh princess…” He whispered, messing with a strand of her hair. “My beautiful princess… I can admit to you that every single second I’ve known you… I’ve loved you…” He whispered, now messing with the sleeve of the gi she was wearing, just like his. She had made it herself to honour him, after hearing these different stories about the hero, how he even sacrificed himself many times to save his home planet, and his loved ones. He was certain about her being the one. Her name… Lady Valasca… Daughter of Turles, once a member of the Planet Trade Organisation, but went on to conquer planets for himself… Yeah you heard me right. She was the daughter of one of his old Saiyan enemies…

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PostPosted: Fri Oct 15, 2010 2:19 pm


Chapter two: The entire evening sky would be in the palm of my hand…



I know what you must be thinking. That Turles was killed around 50 years ago, how can he have such a young daughter, just hitting her 20’s? Well it was the period of time when a void was opened up, the other side of it being hell. She’s the daughter he never met. Goku only found out about her heritage after seeing her transform into Super Saiyan 1. Her mother, who was on this planet as well, explained what happened between her and Turles. For those 2 days he actually managed to stay on Earth, she described it as a holiday romance. She wasn’t a human being, she was actually from the Centriprian race, who look like exactly like humans, but just have these amazing purple eyes. Valasca had them, and it would mesmerise Goku every single time he would look into them, this amazing swirl of dark purple and black that would light up her face.

It was morning now, and Goku was just in a light sleeping state. As soon as he felt Valasca move in her sleep, snuffling her face deeper into his chest, he opened his eyes, to look down at her. He felt the corners of his mouth rise a little, into a small smile.
‘She’s so cute’ he thought to himself, and then sighed a little, turning his head to look at the alarm clock on the dressing table. He sighed, seeing how early it was, and wondered why he couldn’t get to sleep. He decided to train for a bit, that would definitely tire him out into a sleep. He gently unravelled Valasca’s arms from around him, and sat up, placing her down onto the bed properly, letting her head fall onto the pillow. Her dark, dark red hair was everywhere, which made him chuckle a little. He carefully, trying not to wake her up, sorted her hair out, and then leaned down, and placed a sweet kiss on her forehead, moving her fringe out of the way with his nose. He then stood up again, and slipped his orange gi on top of the blue one he was already wearing, and then sat down on the bed, picking up one of his boots from the side, and pulling them on. As he was doing so, Valasca opened her eyes gently, having been woken up by Goku’s constant banging hit foot onto the dressing table as he was putting his boots on, and then cursing himself a little. It would make her giggle every single time, but this time she just smiled.
‘Never going to get bored of this…’ She thought to herself, gently lifting herself up into a sitting position, and then gently wrapped her arms around him, snuggling into his back.
“Did I wake you up?” Goku curiously asked.
“Yeah, but don’t worry. Glad you did…” She whispered back, and he turned around to face her. She moved her arms to around his neck now, placing them on the back of his neck. “You look sad this morning… What’s wrong?”
“Nothing…”
“Tell me.” She encouraged, bringing his face up to look at her, with placing her index finger underneath his chin, and gently pulling up.
“Just… Didn’t get any sleep last night again…” He revealed.
“Thinking about your family again?” She asked sweetly, and he sighed, whilst nodding, and then placed his hands over his face.
“I don’t get it; I thought this was the best thing to do. I miss all of them.” He said.
“Then go and see them.”
“I can’t.” He said, looking at her again. “The boys… They’ll hate me.”
“If they really love you… They’ll understand that you need someone, and that it wasn’t your fault for falling in love again.” She said, and he looked at her, shocked at what she just said. “I heard you last night…” She revealed, a little cheeky smile appearing on her lips, which made him chuckle a little. “Your wife died Goku… And you needed someone. They’ll understand, they’re your sons, and you need to see that Grand daughter of yours as well.” She said, placing a hand on his cheek, wiping a tear which surprisingly dropped from Goku’s eye. “It’s been 20 years.”
“And… You won’t hate me if I go back and see them again?” He curiously asked, and another small smile appeared on her lips.
“I’ll only hate you if you don’t come back to me afterwards.” She playfully teased him, which caused a smile to appear on his face, which made her laugh.
“If I could reach up and grab a star every time you made me smile… The entire evening sky would be in the palm of my hand.” He suddenly came out with.
“Wow… When did you get so good at that sort of talk?” She asked.
“I learnt from the best.” He teased her.
“Aha yeah, don’t ever forget that.” She teased back, making both of them laugh. He then leaned forward, but Valasca stopped him, by placing a hand on his chest.
“Not before brushing teeth.” She stated which made him whine a little, and her laugh.
“Fine, meany.” He replied, and then stood up from the bed. “I’m going to train for a bit okay?”
“Just… Think about what I said… About you going to see your family back on Earth.” She reminded him, and he nodded.
“I will… Thanks Val.” He replied, and she smiled, as he walked out of the room with that.
“Val… I like that.” She whispered to herself, and then nodded. “Yeah.”
PostPosted: Sat Oct 16, 2010 8:02 am


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woow thats really awesome. I love it!
Keep going please!! User Image


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PostPosted: Sat Oct 16, 2010 7:38 pm


Ha, I'm coming out with millions of fanfics now lol. I'll probably post another few chapters of 'My Lonely Angel' tomorrow, seeming that it's like 3.30 in the morning right now and I'm writing a DBZ/Doctor Who cross over fanfic which just came into my mind confused
But you know me and my fav shows lmao.

I'll post some chapters of 'The Loneliness of a True King' tomorrow as well, actually going to plan out the next chapter now cause I'm kinda bored.

Anyway, just a reminder of what's going on right now.

-Amy signing off! biggrin
PostPosted: Sat Oct 16, 2010 7:44 pm


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PostPosted: Sun Oct 17, 2010 4:59 am


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Shon: "I wouldn't hate ppl for those reasons though I don't like it cuz I couldn't ever really see Goku cheating on Chi-Chi unless the story took place in another Universe (like how DB Multiverse has many DBZ Universes) where Goku was slightly different and more inclined to be able to cheat on Chi-Chi. I'd accept it more if it was a Goku from an Alternate Universe. If you changed it to something like that then I'd be fine with it.

I mean one of my Gaian Friend's Character, Broliena (Broly's Twin Sister), is in a relationship with Goku, but I'm fine with it since she says that he is a Goku from an alternate Universe.

Do you get what I'm Saiyan?"
PostPosted: Sun Oct 17, 2010 6:14 am


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Shon: "I wouldn't hate ppl for those reasons though I don't like it cuz I couldn't ever really see Goku cheating on Chi-Chi unless the story took place in another Universe (like how DB Multiverse has many DBZ Universes) where Goku was slightly different and more inclined to be able to cheat on Chi-Chi. I'd accept it more if it was a Goku from an Alternate Universe. If you changed it to something like that then I'd be fine with it.

I mean one of my Gaian Friend's Character, Broliena (Broly's Twin Sister), is in a relationship with Goku, but I'm fine with it since she says that he is a Goku from an alternate Universe.

Do you get what I'm Saiyan?"


Hey there...

Okay if you read through it, it says that Chichi died a few years back, and that Goku had just simply fallen in love again. He's not cheating on her, he just feels like he is because of the feelings he has towards Valasca now.

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PostPosted: Sun Oct 17, 2010 6:50 am


Doctor_Who_Amy_Pond
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Shon: "I wouldn't hate ppl for those reasons though I don't like it cuz I couldn't ever really see Goku cheating on Chi-Chi unless the story took place in another Universe (like how DB Multiverse has many DBZ Universes) where Goku was slightly different and more inclined to be able to cheat on Chi-Chi. I'd accept it more if it was a Goku from an Alternate Universe. If you changed it to something like that then I'd be fine with it.

I mean one of my Gaian Friend's Character, Broliena (Broly's Twin Sister), is in a relationship with Goku, but I'm fine with it since she says that he is a Goku from an alternate Universe.

Do you get what I'm Saiyan?"


Hey there...

Okay if you read through it, it says that Chichi died a few years back, and that Goku had just simply fallen in love again. He's not cheating on her, he just feels like he is because of the feelings he has towards Valasca now.


Shon: "Sorry, I only read the first chapter. Now then is there any of the famous DBZ-style action or is it just a love-story? If there is a villain and action, I'll read on. If it's just a love-story then I'm not really interested."
PostPosted: Sun Oct 17, 2010 7:32 am


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Doctor_Who_Amy_Pond
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Shon: "I wouldn't hate ppl for those reasons though I don't like it cuz I couldn't ever really see Goku cheating on Chi-Chi unless the story took place in another Universe (like how DB Multiverse has many DBZ Universes) where Goku was slightly different and more inclined to be able to cheat on Chi-Chi. I'd accept it more if it was a Goku from an Alternate Universe. If you changed it to something like that then I'd be fine with it.

I mean one of my Gaian Friend's Character, Broliena (Broly's Twin Sister), is in a relationship with Goku, but I'm fine with it since she says that he is a Goku from an alternate Universe.

Do you get what I'm Saiyan?"


Hey there...

Okay if you read through it, it says that Chichi died a few years back, and that Goku had just simply fallen in love again. He's not cheating on her, he just feels like he is because of the feelings he has towards Valasca now.


Shon: "Sorry, I only read the first chapter. Now then is there any of the famous DBZ-style action or is it just a love-story? If there is a villain and action, I'll read on. If it's just a love-story then I'm not really interested."


Oh I'm not really good with that lovey dovey stuff really... Gets me kinda uncomfortable so OF COURSE there's gonna be DBZ-style action lol!

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