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 Posted: Sun Oct 17, 2010 12:31 am
I have no idea for the name, and I'm still working out a few details of the story. But, I have the basics down.
You COULD consider this based off of Star Wars. Is it even possible to make an epic futuristic story with laser swords and giant spaceships WITHOUT it being considered a Star Wars rip-off?
Well, instead of the force, SOME people are born with a rare
blood-type, which reacts with their body differently. Some people gain a mental ability which allows them to lift objects from a distance, though the larger the object, the greater the strain on their body. Some gain physical ability, able to punch harder, move faster, jump higher, than others. The abilities are spread through many categories. These abilities appear usually at the ages of 7, and the parents then are left to decide to either keep the child's power hidden, or give them to Guardia to fight in the war. However, the powers usually do not remain hidden for long, and either the Guardia's "Special" force will find them, or they'll be kidnapped by Oblivion, the group opposing Guardia, going for Universal domination and all that. Guardia and Oblivion each have a "special force" . . They're the people that have the rare bloodtype, and master their "ability". They use the rare, and EXPENSIVE, Plasma blades. Basically, 3-foot laser swords.
The story itself is from two points of view - That of a Guardia special forces member, and an Oblivion special forces member, their journeys, and when they eventually meet for the fight o' the century.
Like I said, I'm still working in all the planning, all I've got is the basic plot skeleton. Any help would be appreciated, any ideas, suggestions, etcetera.
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Posted: Sun Oct 17, 2010 12:43 am
Oh, and here's a little preview of my writing style. Basically, each chapter will be a different character, starting first with Guardia's girl, Kallian. Chapter 1 The smell of death, blood, and fear fills the air, as war rages around the 15 year old girl, blood staining her school uniform. Her house had already been destroyed, her home town in ruins. She screams, as five Oblivion soldiers, red blood glinting on their black body armor, aim energy rifles at her.
Out of nowhere, a strong arm scoops her up in a tackle, and the stranger rolls, shielding her from impact, as the vile soldiers fire their weapons at the now empty spot. The stranger who rescued her pulls out a small pistol, and fires five shots, each making a quiet hum, each causing a soldier to fall.
The girl looks up at her rescuer, finding him to be a Guardia soldier without his helmet, the usually bright white armor dulled with dirt and dust. He appears to be no more than nineteen, long black hair, calm, caring blue eyes. He sets the girl down, and stands, his expression growing solemn. He nods to himself, then, and runs forward, disappearing in the dust.Yeah, it's only a couple paragraphs. The story itself is going to be much longer, I promise you, I just need to know if I should continue it here.
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Posted: Sun Oct 17, 2010 8:21 pm
I LOVE THIS! Continue it! RIGHT NOW. heart
Please write more. SO interesting!
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Posted: Sun Oct 17, 2010 8:52 pm
Dark Mistress Rissa I LOVE THIS! Continue it! RIGHT NOW. heart
Please write more. SO interesting! You like it? Yay. biggrin It's my first time trying to write a War scene. I suppose that deserves the full chapter. Maybe a bit of the next, too.
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Posted: Mon Oct 18, 2010 2:02 pm
Well, after I shower, eat, and possibly do my english homework, I'll start righting. Check my journals for the actual chapters. I'm still keeping this alive in hopes someone will give me ideas. Atleast for a title.
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Posted: Thu Oct 28, 2010 1:53 am
In all honesty, I am not a big fan of Star Wars, but I find this interesting. Continue writing, I want to know more of this story. biggrin
And, is it too late to suggest a title? If not, then I suggest these: Synonymous Diversity, or A Universal Diversity.
They're not that good, but I've tried to come up with unique story names that could somewhat relate to the plot you've given us so far.
Synonymous. Guardia and Oblivion both use a rare 'ability' to create an army, but one is for protection, while the other is for domination. Thus, Diversity; since the use of these rare abilities are used for goals completely different from the other.
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Posted: Thu Oct 28, 2010 3:47 pm
Synonymous Diversity sounds doable . . Perhaps I'll tweak it a bit, but it's appreciated.
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Posted: Sat Nov 06, 2010 10:45 pm
Dante Helsing You COULD consider this based off of Star Wars. Is it even possible to make an epic futuristic story with laser swords and giant spaceships WITHOUT it being considered a Star Wars rip-off? You seem to have the actual topic sorted out, but this paragraph struck me as requiring comment. Yes, it is. Easily so. You need to try hard to make sure that's the case with yours, too, otherwise you're doing it wrong. Unless a major Star Wars geek is the one saying it's a rip-off, you need to take it seriously for what it is. Bad. I would be a little concerned for your writing if you were able to just laugh off that sort of criticism with "well, you can't not rip it off." That's the sort of thing those bad authors you hate do. Even to joke about it is troubling, since jokes often have that grain of truth.
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Posted: Tue Aug 23, 2011 10:02 am
My suggestion for a title would be "Diffrentiation". (Or "The End of Innocence.")
Oh, and please avoid the cliché of the Guardia and Oblivion members falling in love. You could also bump up Kallian's age a bit if you want - y'know, to give her more experience in battle and make her more physically mature, thus stronger.
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Posted: Tue Aug 23, 2011 4:55 pm
Candra delune My suggestion for a title would be "Diffrentiation". (Or "The End of Innocence.") Oh, and please avoid the cliché of the Guardia and Oblivion members falling in love. You could also bump up Kallian's age a bit if you want - y'know, to give her more experience in battle and make her more physically mature, thus stronger. Differentiation sounds good. smile Quote: The smell of death, blood, and fear fills the air, as war rages around the 15 year old girl, blood staining her school uniform. Her house had already been destroyed, her home town in ruins. She screams, as five Oblivion soldiers, red blood glinting on their black body armor, aim energy rifles at her. I don't know what your plot is, but I am guessing it's going to be some sort of Revenge driven story... if that's the case, I do suggest bumping her age up as well since otherwise it becomes illogical for a 15 year old to be beating down trained soliders... even with some prior training for whatever reason, she's still going to have less experience then any of the soliders. Looks cool so far though. ^_^
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