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PostPosted: Sat Oct 30, 2010 3:02 pm


Just a basic idea for a story that I came up with, and I'd like to see if you people think it may get somewhere. I haven't really come up with a great title, so for now, it's just called "The Zoetics."

So here's sort of an outline of what could be happening in it:

Alan is your average boy of the late 1990s or early 2000s walking along an empty street during a storm when he gets struck by lightning. The flash gives him passage to this white room, the gateway between God and Earth. God is ready to answer Alan's prayer -- to find his purpose -- but Alan decides he isn't as ready for it as he thought. He becomes trapped in the dimension until he makes up his mind. By the time he actually has, God has shut him out. He never realizes it, but he has been trapped in the dimension for thirty years without growing older or even noticing the passing time. Eventually he finds a dreamer and sends his message -- "free me" -- to her and he escapes the limbo. But when he comes back to earth, he finds it has fallen to chaos. America is no longer as free as it once claimed to be. A monster, a devil, has risen with evil followers ready to cast peoples' souls to hell to become his followers if they deliberately choose to disobey him. Alan and Aislinn, the dreamer, plan a rebellion and build an army to take down the devil, and are falling in love with each other through it all. Will they be able to stop the devil before all the zoetics, like Alan and Aislinn, are gone for good?

Glossary:
Zoetic (noun) :: a person who is truly alive
Lifeless (noun) :: empty shells of former beings, controlled by the Devil; the Devil's minions whose souls have been cast down to hell
PostPosted: Sat Oct 30, 2010 4:02 pm


Sounds like fun, but for some reason it comes across as more of an anime or manga storyline than a novel.

Of course, that might be my inner otaku speaking.

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PostPosted: Tue Feb 08, 2011 4:57 am


This sounds really good. :3

The concept is interesting. It looks to the point and defined but open enough to give a reader the chance for a few surprises.



I wouldn't say Anime/Manga like because anime/manga is not a genre... it's a media, though finding good fantasy in that media is easier than in novels sometimes so I can see where the thought comes from. (Lately it's become an annoyance for me to hear Anime/Manga refered to as a genre... so... I can't help myself but to say s**t.)
PostPosted: Wed May 04, 2011 6:32 pm


at first i asked myself "why would God shut him out?" then a cool thought occurred to me. When Alan finally decides he wants to know what his purpose is, God shuts him out because his purpose was to go back to Earth and deal with all the Zoetics or something.

this may have nothing to do with what you were asking for but it was a cool thought to me so i just posted it anyway rolleyes

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