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 Posted: Sun Apr 10, 2011 5:21 pm
Ah, well, the title kind of explains it all. I am in the midst of a story and I seem to have gotten myself a bit stuck. Therefore, input of any kind would be greatly appreciated. As a note, this story is very graphic as it is, so I have no problems with adult-rated contributions.
Quick basis of the current place in said story: Palus Demens is an soft-spoken and slightly mad member of a fallen race. His lineage led him to be falsely accused of several crimes, including the accidental death of his lover. He was banished across the sea to a distant kingdom as punishment.
After the harsh treatment he has received in his new territory, Palus has finally decided to journey back home and get revenge--and kill anyone foolish enough to get in the way.
Okay, so I've got dear Palus traveling by night through a forest in the middle of a thunderstorm. He has just mutilated a child who pursued him after he murdered the poor kid's parents in the last town. I would like to have him do something interesting on his way, preferably something to do with nature. I have considered throwing in a few flashbacks of his old life (before he was entirely deranged), but I intend to save most of those until later in the story for spoiler purposes.
Any ideas, my lovely guildmates?
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Posted: Mon Apr 11, 2011 6:29 am
You could have him savagely kill the kid. He could see the kid as getting in his way.
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Posted: Mon Apr 11, 2011 9:21 am
If the kid isn't already dead I would go with what the person above me said. Why not throw more graphic things in there right?
On the other hand maybe a flashback would be nice. But nothing too big because of what you mentioned.
Or perhaps in this forest he finds an adorable animal of some sort that just wants to be friends. I won't say anymore on that because it could go one of two ways one of them being extremely cruel.
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Posted: Mon Apr 11, 2011 8:07 pm
As wonderful as killing the kid sounds, I had initially planned to leave him alive. My only reason for doing this is that I plan for there to be a fifty-year time skip, and have the kid reappear as an old man and meet Palus' descendant.
@ Sylrind: I do like your animal idea, perhaps I can play with that a bit and see what I come up with... -insert evil grin here-
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