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 Posted: Sun May 08, 2011 4:54 am
Tear drops fall to the ground
No one wants to care any more
I feel worthless and hurt
This worlds full of fakes and pricks
No one seems to care if i get hurt
Loneliness and hopelessness
My crying soul falls apart
But no one will care
its as if in not even there
Im invisible
When people do see me
they say theres that emo girl
Life never felt so bad untill
my friends went
Why does the world hate me
Why does it always rain on me
All these whys and yet no answers.
Just 1 of my poems U dont like it tough s**t cus this fourms for expression urself.
X_x
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Posted: Sun May 08, 2011 9:28 am
......
Do you know the definition of a poem?
No, seriously.
I'm trying to give you constructive criticism.
Do you understand what defines a poem?
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Posted: Sun May 08, 2011 11:11 am
Yes i do iv been doing poems at my skwl ant this is just 1 type of poem i no
poems dont have 2 ryme they dont have 2 make sense and there a way 2 express urself.
An thats how I express myself. And if u dont like it tough s**t.
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Posted: Mon May 16, 2011 2:19 pm
wow this is really good i hope u post some more i really liked it ^_^ !!!!!!! 4laugh rofl xd xp
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Posted: Mon May 16, 2011 2:57 pm
egoxromantic ...... Do you know the definition of a poem? No, seriously. I'm trying to give you constructive criticism. Do you understand what defines a poem? A poem doesn't require the ability to rhythm, a poem can even be a picture. Don't be so full of your self and that isn't constructive criticism thats called Hate. If you don't believe me, well then you don't know the definition as I have been doing poetry since I was age 10 and I've aced every single poetry assignment up until my grade 11 year, I've even had one of my teachers cry while reading my assignment.(tear drop on paper is still there to this day, lol)
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Posted: Mon May 16, 2011 3:24 pm
Eco White 24538 Yes i do iv been doing poems at my skwl ant this is just 1 type of poem i no poems dont have 2 ryme they dont have 2 make sense and there a way 2 express urself. An thats how I express myself. And if u dont like it tough s**t. I can't seem to find the rhythm. It just doesn't flow very easily. You don't take constructive criticism very well, do you?
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Posted: Tue Jul 05, 2011 12:55 am
monckey77 egoxromantic ...... Do you know the definition of a poem? No, seriously. I'm trying to give you constructive criticism. Do you understand what defines a poem? A poem doesn't require the ability to rhythm, a poem can even be a picture. Don't be so full of your self and that isn't constructive criticism thats called Hate. If you don't believe me, well then you don't know the definition as I have been doing poetry since I was age 10 and I've aced every single poetry assignment up until my grade 11 year, I've even had one of my teachers cry while reading my assignment.(tear drop on paper is still there to this day, lol) I agree. As long there is a feeling that's being expressed, it's poetry.
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Posted: Tue Jul 05, 2011 1:00 am
what do you guys think of this:
Waiting is all that I can muster
As another night falls
To that of which is my time
Entice me was your words
Time and time again
Guide me now as you did
Interfering with the hands of fate
Reminding to all who fall
Love is but more than a mire word
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Posted: Tue Jul 05, 2011 1:02 am
sorry if my spelling is off.
(never was any good at it sweatdrop )
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Posted: Tue Jul 05, 2011 8:40 am
cereza91 what do you guys think of this: Waiting is all that I can muster As another night falls To that of which is my time Entice me was your words Time and time again Guide me now as you did Interfering with the hands of fate Reminding to all who fall Love is but more than a mire word "Muster", What an amazing word. Never knew that one. your poem is quite powerful, you got a talent. c;
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Posted: Tue Jul 05, 2011 7:29 pm
monckey77 cereza91 what do you guys think of this: Waiting is all that I can muster As another night falls To that of which is my time Entice me was your words Time and time again Guide me now as you did Interfering with the hands of fate Reminding to all who fall Love is but more than a mire word "Muster", What an amazing word. Never knew that one. your poem is quite powerful, you got a talent. c; thanks for the complement, but honestly it's not all that great.
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Posted: Wed Jul 06, 2011 6:23 am
cereza91 monckey77 cereza91 what do you guys think of this: Waiting is all that I can muster As another night falls To that of which is my time Entice me was your words Time and time again Guide me now as you did Interfering with the hands of fate Reminding to all who fall Love is but more than a mire word "Muster", What an amazing word. Never knew that one. your poem is quite powerful, you got a talent. c; thanks for the complement, but honestly it's not all that great. That's another talent, if you can't seem to think it's great and you always try and fix it and make it better, eventually you get a work of art even time cannot forget.
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Posted: Wed Jul 06, 2011 2:28 pm
monckey77 cereza91 monckey77 cereza91 what do you guys think of this: Waiting is all that I can muster As another night falls To that of which is my time Entice me was your words Time and time again Guide me now as you did Interfering with the hands of fate Reminding to all who fall Love is but more than a mire word "Muster", What an amazing word. Never knew that one. your poem is quite powerful, you got a talent. c; thanks for the complement, but honestly it's not all that great. That's another talent, if you can't seem to think it's great and you always try and fix it and make it better, eventually you get a work of art even time cannot forget. thanks. at least someone thinks that, unlike my older bro. here something just for you: you are my all always there even with out my call I've turned you into my coverall so when my tears are to dewfall your love is soon to befall
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Posted: Wed Jul 06, 2011 2:31 pm
cereza91 monckey77 cereza91 monckey77 cereza91 what do you guys think of this: Waiting is all that I can muster As another night falls To that of which is my time Entice me was your words Time and time again Guide me now as you did Interfering with the hands of fate Reminding to all who fall Love is but more than a mire word "Muster", What an amazing word. Never knew that one. your poem is quite powerful, you got a talent. c; thanks for the complement, but honestly it's not all that great. That's another talent, if you can't seem to think it's great and you always try and fix it and make it better, eventually you get a work of art even time cannot forget. thanks. at least someone thinks that, unlike my older bro. here something just for you: you are my all always there even with out my call I've turned you into my coverall so when my tears are to dewfall your love is soon to befall wait a sec, it sounds better like this: you are my all turning you into my coverall your always there even with out my call so when my tears are to dewfall your love is soon to befall
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Posted: Wed Jul 06, 2011 5:21 pm
cereza91 cereza91 monckey77 cereza91 monckey77 cereza91 what do you guys think of this: Waiting is all that I can muster As another night falls To that of which is my time Entice me was your words Time and time again Guide me now as you did Interfering with the hands of fate Reminding to all who fall Love is but more than a mire word "Muster", What an amazing word. Never knew that one. your poem is quite powerful, you got a talent. c; thanks for the complement, but honestly it's not all that great. That's another talent, if you can't seem to think it's great and you always try and fix it and make it better, eventually you get a work of art even time cannot forget. thanks. at least someone thinks that, unlike my older bro. here something just for you: you are my all always there even with out my call I've turned you into my coverall so when my tears are to dewfall your love is soon to befall wait a sec, it sounds better like this: you are my all turning you into my coverall your always there even with out my call so when my tears are to dewfall your love is soon to befall Another beautiful one, thanks for that.
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