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The girl who over came time[fantasy and underconstruction]

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Rin Sekodusu

PostPosted: Fri Apr 20, 2012 6:54 am


Chapter 1

The sky was clear,the sun was able to be seen shining in the sky, crying of a newborn baby was heard coming from a hospital room,in the arms of her mother a baby girl with black hair and blue eyes was seen. Her name was Mimi,people thought she was a miracle birth,she was born not crying.
Months go on as she began to grow into a young beautiful young lady,She went to school every day and her grandfather one day showed a well in there shrine.
PostPosted: Fri Jun 08, 2012 12:35 pm


That was very vague and hard to understand the story line. Perhaps add more to the story, details. Setting perhaps. Once you edit it and add more I'd love to read it and crituque it without so much . . . critic.

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