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 Posted: Tue Jul 03, 2012 9:20 pm
Separated,
but never alone
in your arms is when I feel home
Through the times both good and bad
your love is the best I have ever had
I miss you all the time
especially the way your eyes shine
and even though I cant see you
no love has ever been more true
for you are mine and I am yours
with any luck forevermore
for even separated as I said
your all I think about as I lay in bed
Dreaming of the day I see you again
so the hole in my chest will begin to mend
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Posted: Tue Jul 03, 2012 9:37 pm
Aw, that's so sweet! I love the way or flowed and rhymed.
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Angstbucket Edgelord Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Jul 04, 2012 12:25 am
That's very pretty ;D The rhymes give it a good pace, but the words soften it into a flow. Me gusta ;D
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Posted: Wed Jul 04, 2012 8:43 pm
Thanks ^_^ this is the first new poem I have written in months and I wasnt sure about it compared to my others, but I can honestly say its my favorite
even if I dont have a title yet
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Posted: Wed Jul 04, 2012 8:48 pm
Ikoi Hanakari Thanks ^_^ this is the first new poem I have written in months and I wasnt sure about it compared to my others, but I can honestly say its my favorite even if I dont have a title yet Why not Seperated? Haha that's what I thought it was called when I was reading it. Just a suggestion. If you want to choose something different, I understand. You are the writer after all.
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Posted: Wed Jul 04, 2012 9:04 pm
Girl on Fire 12 Ikoi Hanakari Thanks ^_^ this is the first new poem I have written in months and I wasnt sure about it compared to my others, but I can honestly say its my favorite even if I dont have a title yet Why not Seperated? Haha that's what I thought it was called when I was reading it. Just a suggestion. If you want to choose something different, I understand. You are the writer after all. Sounds good
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