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Posted: Sat Sep 08, 2012 1:05 pm
A man was lying in the middle of the street, not moving one inch. There was blood splattered around his head and I was sure he was dead. Somehow, I can always tell if they are dead. I was in my truck, waiting for the policeman to direct me around to continue on my way home, but the image of the man wouldn't leave my mind. Once I was home, I tried to focus on anything else. I played my piano, my guitar, and plenty of different video games. I had heavy metal music playing in the background the whole time, just trying to make the image of the man go away. The man had had a shaved head, he was fairly well built and had had his shirt off and his legs curled up. He was white as a ghost. A paramedic had been hovering over him, taking his pulse. That pale white man never left my mind the whole night. Even as I slept, his image was controlling my mind. I didn't tell anyone what I saw, why concern them with me? I continued on at school, pretending to worry about the upcoming homecoming football game. No one really guessed what was on my mind... No one guessed that i was thinking of a dead man. No one guessed that it was me that hit him. No one guessed that it was me that killed him. Worst of all, no one guessed that I liked it.
(this actually happened. I didn't actually hit him and kill him but the rest is actually a true story. It was actually pretty freaky.)
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Posted: Mon Nov 26, 2012 4:50 pm
It has a very chilling, very emotive start. It wakes you up the story and makes you want to read on. Good job on it, I think you should continue.
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Posted: Mon Nov 26, 2012 7:09 pm
Yeah, it was a pretty freaky experience though. I just have to write it onto paper. that's the only way I can write decent stories lol. I type them up later sweatdrop
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