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As i awaken from this sorrow known as life,
I see your face from afar.
My beaten and tore body reaching vainly for you.
my tears flowed softly as I cannot reach you.
The sorrow holds me down, beats my body.
I weep softly, for you have gone.
I cry your name in vain,
I reach blindly for you.

The darkness seals me away,
my mind is turned.
I cruse softly at myself, for I' am to blame
I rip and throw my body, trying to break free
but the sorrow holds tight,
Holding my body, went my heart is with you.

Then light breaks the darkness,
I pull and break the darkness I rip free.
I run, without fall I run to the light.
I fall back to the sorrow,
My body, my mind too weak to push on.
I lay still as the sorrow returns.

Then you pull me from this sorrow,
Your sweet touch wiped the ashes of sorrow from my eyes.
lips of crisom red pressed to mine frees my heart.
Your love brights this darkness,
Your love like a knife of happiness slices away the darkness of sorrow and dispire!
With your arms around me,
I' am free once more, happiness returns.

(first draft.)

The word I highlighted in indigo (went) just seems...out of place. The stanza highlighted in blue is a little bit awkward. I love the poem. Overall, it flows well, and has great content. It is really good. I can tell you put a lot of feeling into this poem. I like it a lot.