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 Posted: Thu Feb 24, 2005 10:03 am
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Posted: Thu Feb 24, 2005 10:06 am
That was great. It has improved from the older version.
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Posted: Thu Feb 24, 2005 10:37 am
your nice... very nice i just noticed somthing... this poem is one of my wrost.... To the Hall Of Shame!.
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Posted: Thu Feb 24, 2005 6:05 pm
Well thank you, smile but I disagree. Beside this first stanza, it is good. Rethink those lines or just take them out completely.
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Posted: Fri Feb 25, 2005 9:51 am
How is that? I re-did Parts of it let me know what you think...
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Posted: Fri Feb 25, 2005 10:51 am
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Posted: Fri Feb 25, 2005 5:26 pm
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Posted: Fri Feb 25, 2005 6:30 pm
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Posted: Fri Mar 18, 2005 9:40 am
Thank you mela! hehe I try..
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