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Viola Concerto [Division Three Lieutenant]

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Blades252

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PostPosted: Sun Oct 27, 2013 11:32 am


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    Full Name: Viola Concerto

    Alias/Title: The Lightning Child

    Nickname: None

    Gender: Female

    Date of Birth: 9198

    Actual Age: 100

    Appearance Age: 7


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    Height: 5'0

    Weight: 98lbs

    Eye Color: Red

    Hair Color: Black

    Nationality: French

    Reiatsu Color: Dark Red


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Occupation: New Division Three Lieutenant

Affiliation: Gotei 13

Former Occupation: Elementary School Student

Former Affiliation: None


Hobbies: Reading, Having Tea, Card Games, Training

Likes: Books, Tea, Thunderstorms, Getting work done

Dislikes: Pink, Makeup, being coddled, being called cute or adorable, people pointing out she's a child, alcohol

Personality: Viola Is quiet, and extremely monotone when she speaks. She shows a little to no emotion when she interacts with anybody. She respects her higher ups and always make sure she shows decent respect to her subordinates. However she has a severe anger issue when people do things such as dote on her or call her adorable. When this happens her red eyes begin to glow and her hair suddenly turns into a shade of white, These are the biggest warning signs of when she is angry. She will also do this even to her higher ups such as her own Captain.

Sexual Preference: Asexual (Even though she is very mature, she still has the child mindset that boys are gross.


Family: None


Background: Viola was originally a normal girl attending school in France She was almost the exact opposite of what she is now, she was once extremely bubbly and very girly. However as she was walking to school one day a drunk driver was trying to find his way home when he swerved onto the sidewalk, striking Viola head on. The paramedics arrived not even a couple minutes after but sadly Viola died on the way to the hospital.

After she died she wandered around for only a few days before a hollow found and attacked her, however an unknown soul reaper arrived just in time to save her. Shortly afterwards the soul reaper performed a Konsō on her. Soon she woke up UN the Rukongai where her new personality began to take shape due to the harsh life there and what happened to her when she was alive.

After living in a rundown shack with a kind old couple she decided to go somewhere and become a soul reaper. After she started Shin'ō Academy she quickly flew through the classes and quickly became the youngest person to become the top student. A day or so before graduation Viola had managed to unlock her shikai. Because of this, and her high achievements in school she was offered a position as Lieutenant for squad three.


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    Zanpakutō Name: Shu Raitoningu 主ライトニング

    Zanpakutō Type: Lightning

    Sealed Zanpakutō:
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    Zanpakutō Spirit:
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    Shikai Incantation: "Streak Across the Sky...!

    Release Appearance: The Tanto Loses its physical shape all together and take on the form of pure lightning that surrounds Viola.

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    Description: In this form Viola has complete control over the lightning and can control it by using her hands to choose its direction.


    Abilities:
    Lightning Whip: Viola can lash out the lightning that has a twenty foot reach, in the time it takes for the lightning to return to her, Viola is has no weapons. (Return Time: 1 post)

    Lightning Spears: Viola can separate the single large strand of lightning into many smaller strands of lightning and launch it at her enemy. The damage dealt depends on how large each one is. (Cool Down: 1 post. Range: 30 - 40 feet, depending)

    Volt Shield: This is a barrier of lightning that can block most Shikai level attacks, depending on what the ability of the shikai is. (Example: Against Renji's shikai, it'd be able to block it. While in contrast it'd be worthless against Rangiku's. It all depends on the shikai.) Basically if the attack is a straightforward, pad on attack then the shield will be able to block it. However if you attack can be manipulated, controlled, and have it's direction changed then it'll be able to bypass the shield.
    It forms a single round wall in front of Viola, as such it does not protect her from the sides and back.
    The shield is able to hold up against most physical attacks unless the attack is that of a bankai.
    It is worth noting that Viola can use the single strand of lightning to block, however The Strand of lightning was made for offense and not defense and as such can only block against normal sword attack and nothing shikai leveled.
    It can also block most Kidō and Bakudō, DEPENDING on which one is used. (Cool Down: 2 - 3 Posts depending on the power of the attack. Such as Kidō attacks #45 and up would cause 3 posts.)


    Voltic Rush: This move forms the lightning into claws on her hands. This technique is mostly used for when she goes in for close combat. However in this form she cannot use any of her other abilities. Each claw is about 1 foot long. (Cool Down: 1 post)


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    Bankai Name: NOT YET ACHIEVED

    Bankai Incantation: NOT YET ACHIEVED

    Release Appearance: NOT YET ACHIEVED

    Description: NOT YET ACHIEVED


    Abilities: NOT YET ACHIEVED


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    Hadō:
    1. Sho (衝 lit. Thrust) 
    4. Byakurai (白雷 lit. Pale Lightning) 
    11. Tsuzuri Raiden (綴雷電 lit. Bound Lightning) 
    12. Fushibi (伏火 lit. Ambush Flare) 
    28. Gaki Rekkō (牙気裂光 lit. Raging Light Fang) 
    31. Shakkahō (赤火砲 lit. Red Fire Cannon) 
    32. Ōkasen (黄火閃 lit. Yellow Fire Flash) 
    33. Sōkatsui (蒼火墜 lit. Blue Fire, Crash Down) 
    38. Seizu (星図 lit. Star Map) 

    Bakudō:
    1. Sai (塞 lit. Restrain) 
    4. Hainawa (這縄 lit. Crawling Rope) 
    6. Shibireyubi (しびれ指 lit. Numbing Finger) 
    8. Seki (斥 lit. Repulse) 
    8. Geki (撃 lit. Strike) 
    9. Hōrin (崩輪 lit. Disintegrating Circle) 
    10. Noren Mekuri (暖簾捲り lit. Curtain Stripping) 
    12. Hakufuku (白伏 lit. White Crawl) 
    15. Inemuri (威眠 lit. Forced Slumber) 
    19. Kōsei Kubun (構成区分 lit. Composed Division) 
    21. Sekienton (赤煙遁 lit. Red Smoke Escape) 
    26. Kyokkō (曲光 lit. Bent Light)
 

Other: N/A
PostPosted: Mon Oct 28, 2013 8:50 am


Blaze Ikari


Hey there, I made the edits.
Also thanks for letting me know about having 5 abilities, I actually did not know that before smile

However I can't do anything about the pictures, they were uploaded from my photobucket and I no longer have the links from where I found the pictures.

Blades252

Perfect Fatcat


Prometheus Blaze
Vice Captain

Magnetic Shapeshifter

PostPosted: Mon Oct 28, 2013 12:39 pm


Hello, I’m Blaze, and I’ll be judging your profile today. Many apologies for the delay.

To start, just a small point, but can you place all of your pictures in links since they’re so large? Helps viewing your profile easier as the pictures displace the natural balance of the skeleton.


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Lightning Whip: Viola can lash out the lightning that has a twenty foot reach.


Needs a cooldown on the technique.

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Lightning Manipulation: Viola can manipulate the lightning to do whatever she desires.


This is too general, and I would ask that you add in depth to the description of this ability to make it less ambiguous. Also it may be a matter of opinion, but that ability looks like it would fit better in the description of the Shikai than as a specific ability. As it stands, you need a range of the lightning she can use, and a cooldown as well.

I feel obligated to remind you that you are allowed to have five Shikai abilities.

Quote me when you’re ready for another review.

Weapons Master Cal
PostPosted: Mon Oct 28, 2013 2:14 pm


I put each of your pictures inside spoilers in order to reduce the size, check it out.

First, good edits.

As for the techniques, when I say cool down, I mean in post form. As time is easily manipulated within a post and can vary from post to post depending on how much happens in said post, seconds/minutes/hours etc isn’t a reliable form of cooldown. I’d ask you go in and edit in post cooldowns, IE how many posts before she can use the ability again.


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Volt Shield: This is a barrier of lightning that can block most Shikai level attacks.


Be more specific. What is considered “most shikai level attacks”? What about Kido, physical attacks, Zanjustu, and Hakuda? Also, an ability that blocks attacks of that caliber requires a slightly longer cooldown compared to other techniques, so make sure you add that in in order to balance it out.

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Lightning Spears: Viola can separate the single large strand of lightning into many smaller strands of lightning and launch it at her enemy. The damage dealt depends on how large each one is.


Needs a range.

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Voltic Rush: This move forms the lightning into claws on her hands. This technique is mostly used for when she goes in for close combat. However in this form she cannot use any of her other abilities.


How long are the lightning claws? This effectively maps out and acts as the range of the technique.

Quote me again when you’re done.

Weapons Master Cal Wrote

Prometheus Blaze
Vice Captain

Magnetic Shapeshifter


Blades252

Perfect Fatcat

PostPosted: Mon Oct 28, 2013 2:57 pm


Blaze Ikari
PostPosted: Mon Oct 28, 2013 3:16 pm


Quote:
Volt Shield: This is a barrier of lightning that can block most Shikai level attacks, depending on what the ability of the shikai is. (Example: Against Renji's shikai, it'd be able to block it. While in contrast it'd be worthless against Rangiku's. It all depends on the shikai.)


Are you saying that it depends if the Shikai is corporeal or not? (Renji's shikai being connected blades and Rangiku's being ash) If so, edit that in to the description of the technique to lessen ambiguity. Enumerate the level of Hado and Bakudo it can block. (Up to #40 for example)

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Lightning Spears: Viola can separate the single large strand of lightning into many smaller strands of lightning and launch it at her enemy. The damage dealt depends on how large each one is. (Range: 30 - 40 feet, depending)


Quote:
Voltic Rush: This move forms the lightning into claws on her hands. This technique is mostly used for when she goes in for close combat. However in this form she cannot use any of her other abilities. Each claw is about 1 foot long.


Both of these abilities still need cooldowns.

Fix these minor things and you should be good.


Weapons Master Cal

Prometheus Blaze
Vice Captain

Magnetic Shapeshifter


Blades252

Perfect Fatcat

PostPosted: Mon Oct 28, 2013 3:37 pm


Blaze Ikari
PostPosted: Mon Oct 28, 2013 3:47 pm


Approved.

Be on the lookout for a counter review from Chan if he deems it so. Otherwise, great job with the quick edits.


Weapons Master Cal

Prometheus Blaze
Vice Captain

Magnetic Shapeshifter


Blades252

Perfect Fatcat

PostPosted: Tue Oct 29, 2013 8:26 am


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