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 Posted: Thu Mar 16, 2006 8:49 pm
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Posted: Thu Mar 16, 2006 10:23 pm
cry Wow... You wrote that?
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Posted: Fri Mar 17, 2006 3:57 am
Awesome story! I would say wow, but I'd sound like a copycat. I give it a 9/10!
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Posted: Fri Mar 17, 2006 11:43 am
eieiovt682 Awesome story! Wow, I'm a copycat. I give it a 9/10! xD
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Posted: Fri Mar 17, 2006 9:03 pm
Yes, any mistakes? From the wow, I'd say it was good.
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Posted: Fri Mar 17, 2006 10:46 pm
shadowspinner13 Yes, any mistakes? From the wow, I'd say it was good. Hmmmm... Nope! Don't see any!
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Posted: Sat Mar 18, 2006 4:06 am
2SkyDragon shadowspinner13 Yes, any mistakes? From the wow, I'd say it was good. Hmmmm... Nope! Don't see any! Well, I found one spot where the words were in reversed order, in this paragraph: Quote: The boy stirred and opened his eyes, the full moon reflecting off of them. In her full light she gave him a radiance that he had lost during the day. The mother moon many ghosts called her. She held many hands through death, far more gently the than sun. She understood what it was like to be a reflection, as she was dependent on Sol for her own glow. But that's the only one I found^-^
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Posted: Sat Mar 18, 2006 8:15 am
Thankyou. I fixed it on the origional so now, I post. FFnet is the true test.
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Posted: Sat Mar 18, 2006 8:21 am
Looks up. I got a no? Humm, I wonder why. how I'm I supose to improve if I don't know why? NOOOOOO.
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Posted: Sat Mar 18, 2006 9:10 am
I personally liked it, but maybe the person that said no hit a random response or something. Or maybe they don't like the genre. *shrugs*
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Posted: Sat Mar 18, 2006 9:57 am
Good point. Since they didn't post why I'll take it as a I didn't read it and wanted to tick you off. It's on FFnet now, is you want to commet there.
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Posted: Sat Mar 18, 2006 10:56 am
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Posted: Sat Mar 18, 2006 1:33 pm
you spelled dying wrong (dieing rolleyes )
but other than that... eek wow...that was really good!!!!!!!!!!! cool 3nodding
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Posted: Sat Mar 18, 2006 2:46 pm
I tend to do that. sweatdrop Oh well, can't fix it now.
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Posted: Sat Mar 18, 2006 5:44 pm
Animekitty47 you spelled dying wrong (dieing rolleyes ) but other than that... eek wow...that was really good!!!!!!!!!!! cool 3nodding Actually, she spelled it right. Dieing: Oh No, they're dieng! Dying: I'm dying my hair red, ok? edit: Nice story, I love it! ^_^ Can't wait till what happens next.
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