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 Posted: Tue Mar 28, 2006 5:52 pm
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Posted: Tue Mar 28, 2006 6:41 pm
Wow. Despite the fact Symphonia isn't my favorite, just reading that made me want to play it again. I've read another Symphonia fanfic, perhaps you've heard of it, it's on the FF.net site... I forget what it's called... wait, "Be Happy". It was done by a friend of mine on another forum. I didn't like it too much because it was too. damn. serious. The final parts of Symphonia were serious enough, I like how you're able to use humor to keep me interested.
Of course, I hope to see some serious stuff, I like the humor. As well, I think you portray the characters pretty well, especially Zelos, I can just picture his gestures and motions with some of his dialouge.
As well, I like the fact that you took a different route from most people with the whole "LloydXCollete" thing.
Now that I've gotten the compliments out of the way, critique time!
First off, some things you should know as far as names and such:
-Aselia (The name of the reunited world)
-Yggdrasil (Mithos' last name, and also the name of the new tree)
-Martel (Mithos' sister, and the Goddess who exists with the tree Yggdrasil)
-Fujibayashi (The last name of the chief in Mizuho. So that actually means, Shihna is the heir to becoming chief. It's clearly stated in a side-quest, but if you didn't know that, now you do)
As well, though I sort of like your narrator questioning what's going on, don't do it too much. I got it confused with some of the dialouge... That being said, I'd also suggest you hit ye old enter key after every quote as to not get confused, here's an example:
"I know you're freezing!" Klarth said.
"Well, can you make it wamer?" Chester asked.
"Unless you want Ifrit to burn your a** to a crisp."
"...."
"Didn't think so, shut up and deal with it!"
"You're the one that was complaining in the first place!"
"Shut up!"
That's how I do it anyways, most people usually put the "Klarth said", "Chester said" after every line as to not confuse it too much. I don't because I've already established the two characters talking... But that's not the main point of what I was getting at. The main point is, by hitting enter (Which you did do at some points) you can then easily separate dialouge rather than hunting for quotation marks in paragraphs. I had to do that because of the narration. If you want to keep your narration style, and hey, I do like it, I'd high suggest going to the enter format with dialouge.
I can't wait to read the next chp.
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Posted: Wed Mar 29, 2006 5:21 pm
Thanks for the great review. I like that people don't just post a few sentences of review and just wait till the next chapter. Huzzah for gaia's limitless text for posting! By the way, did you get the name of the reunited world and the tree from one of the other games? I haven't played any others, so this may be kind of a newbie question on my part. (I know all of the other names, though.)
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Posted: Wed Mar 29, 2006 5:23 pm
JKH Thanks for the great review. I like that people don't just post a few sentences of review and just wait till the next chapter. Huzzah for gaia's limitless text for posting! By the way, did you get the name of the reunited world and the tree from one of the other games? I haven't played any others, so this may be kind of a newbie question on my part. (I know all of the other names, though.) Aselia is the world in Phantasia. And since Phantasia's tree is named Yggdrasil, and Symphonia never says the name of the tree and has a villain named Yggdrasil, it's implied that Symphonia is Phantasia's prequel. So that's where I got Aselia from.
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Posted: Thu Mar 30, 2006 4:41 pm
KirbyVolt JKH Thanks for the great review. I like that people don't just post a few sentences of review and just wait till the next chapter. Huzzah for gaia's limitless text for posting! By the way, did you get the name of the reunited world and the tree from one of the other games? I haven't played any others, so this may be kind of a newbie question on my part. (I know all of the other names, though.) Aselia is the world in Phantasia. And since Phantasia's tree is named Yggdrasil, and Symphonia never says the name of the tree and has a villain named Yggdrasil, it's implied that Symphonia is Phantasia's prequel. So that's where I got Aselia from. gotcha. I need to get busy and buy Phantasia for GBA. gonk
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Posted: Sun Apr 02, 2006 8:33 pm
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Posted: Sun Apr 09, 2006 7:24 pm
Chapter 3: Party Boat
"Avast, ye sea dogs!" Zelos shouted in a pirate-like voice, standing at the wheel of the EC in the little command center booth. He still had the captain's hat, but Lloyd took back the eyepatch earlier and left Zelos's hair slightly ruffled. Raine stood behind him wearing a white and blue sailor cap. She was not amused the slightest bit; she was wearing an embarrassing hat, near Zelos, on a boat that he's piloting, out in the vast open water of the sea... She was not a happy first mate. Night had already fallen, and Zelos went out of the room to light several torches that ran along the edge of the EC-- er, yacht. Everybody else was dressed in formal clothes and having food and drinks (provided by Regal, of course) on the deck. Music was playing from a band dressed in all black. One played something called a bass guitar, another was hitting what looked like a bunch of pans and metal plates set up on stands. Another played a more familiar instrument, the piano, but it was flat and set up on a stand. In front of them was a female singer. The music was loud and fast, but it sounded great!
"Genis! You look so cute in your formal outfit!" Chocolat said to Genis with a wide smile. She was wearing a thin white dress that went down to her ankles, and had a short slit on the side. It didn't have any sleeves, and went up to a choker on her neck. She wore a silver braclet on both wrists, and she had her hair up in a bun. Genis was wearing his easter Sunday outfit, pouting at her comments.
He blushed and said, "I-it's just a new outfit, is all!" He turned away with his arms crossed, and walked towards Presea, who was wearing her little lady dress.
"Oh, come on! you're no fun!" Chocolat said disappointedly, putting her hands on her hips.
Colette walked over to her, "Hi, Chocolat!" She was wearing a pink, frilly one-piece dress and red shoes.
"Oh, hello, Chosen!" Chocolat responded happily.
"I'm not a Chosen anymore, so you can call me Colette, okay?"
"Oh, of course!" Chocolat scratched the back of her head. "By the way, do you think that the Desians are going to ever come back? I pray to Martel that they don't..."
"I'm sure they won't. Besides, they probably have families to go to. I mean, everyone has a family, right?" She smiled happily at the thought.
"Uh... I really envy the way you always look on the brighter side of things." Colette looked at her, confused. "I don't think that I can ever think the way you do."
"But that's what makes you you, right? Lloyd told me that a long time ago."
"Heh... I guess you're right. Lloyd really isn't a bad person, is he?"
"Of course not! He had good intensions from the very beginning."
On the other side of the deck:
"Lloyd!" Sheena yelled as she walked over to him. She was wearing her purple dress with the two straps that went over her breasts, and had let her hair down instead of in a bun. She wouldn't want to copy Chocolat, now, would she?
"Sheena! You're finally dressed!" Lloyd said happily. The outfit he wore was his Nobleman outfit. The only differences were that it was all white, including the scarf thing that trailed behind him, and the top was like atrench coat.
"Hey! It takes women longer to get ready than men! And if I recall, the first time you wore your Nobleman style clothes, you needed help to get dressed!" She looked at him slyly.
Lloyd blushed, "Th-that was--" Sheena laughed and leaned on the railing, looking out at the bluish horizon.
"I can't beleive that it's finally over..." She said as her eyes narrowed.
"Neither can I. Having a celebration like this, you'd think that all of those people never died at the hands of Cruxis and the Desians." Lloyd leaned back on the railing next to her. "After four thousand years of Chosen after Chosen dieing, half-elves turning into angels, and the worlds being separated, we stopped it all within a year... After all of that, the Eternal Sword, the pact with Origin, and even angelic abilities were all given to me. All thanks to my mother's momento and my friends..." He looked at the exsphere on the back of his hand, and then at the Ring of the Pact that was on his ring finger.
Sheena looked at him curiously, "What? Are you having second thoughts about destroying your own exsphere on our journey?"
"...Kind of..." Lloyd said slowly. Sheena was surprised; she couldn't think of any time that Lloyd had second thoughts about anything he wanted to do. He let out a sigh and looked up at the stars. "But I know that it must be done, so I have to accept that in the end..."
Right next to them, Kate and Pietro were talking to eachother. Pietro wore a spiffy white tux, and Kate wore a beautiful dress that was the same color of her hair with gloves that went almost up to her shoulders. They met eachother in Luin, where Kate was planning to live the rest of her life away from the lab in Sybak. That's where she met Pietro. She'd never really thought about having a relationship with anyone, let alone a human. But she felt something special about him. Pietro was opposed to half-elf descrimination, so they eventually built up a relationship in Luin. Suddenly, the music changed to a slow song.
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Pietro turned toKate, and said politely, "May I have this dance?"
Kate, rather taken aback, blushed a rosy red, and turned away with her hands on her cheeks. "Pietro! Everyone we know will be watching us!" She said with embarrassment.
"Come on! Why not? I happen to know this song, and it would be a pity not to dance to it with you." He held out his hand to her.
Kate looked over her shoulder at his hand. She turned fully towards him, smiled, and said, "Okay, maybe just for a little while." After fixing her glasses, she took his hand all lady-like, and they stepped onto the center area of the deck. Pietro put his hands on Kate's hips, and she put her arms around his neck. They swayed back and forth, stepping to the slow rhythm of the song. Everyone seemed to stop talking, and watched them dance with eachother. Kate glanced to either side, and then down at Pietro's chest, blushing. But she was also smiling at the same time. She couldn't be happier.
Sheena was watching them, smiling. I wonder if Lloyd and I can dance like that sme time? She looked down sadly, But are we really ready to tell everyone? I'm a little anxious about it, but I'm not so sure about Lloyd. Lloyd was leaning against the railing just like he was before, watching Pietro and Kate dancing. He caught her looking at him out of the corner of his eye, and smiled widely back at her.
Up in the bridge of the ship:
On the door to the command center was a makeshift sign that said, "Do NOT enter! Hunny swooning in progress! wink " taped on it. The room itself was rather small, and had few controls besides stearing and acceleration. It had a small kitchen in the back, as well. The only four things in the room were the stearing wheel, a table, and two chairs. One of the chairs was a leather cushioned armchair for the captain.
"Look at those two," Zelos said, stearing the ship with his foot as he sat in his captain's chair, looking out the window at everybody. His captain's hat was tilted to the side slightly. "That Pietro's a regular stud!"
"No, he's a good man that helped the most in rebuilding Luin!" Raine retorted. She was standing behind him next to a table. The first mate cap was resting on the tabletop.
"Whatever you say, my gorgeous first mate, but I was seriously considering seeing Kate after the trip." He crossed his leg over the other, and leaned back in his chair.
"You hardly know the first thing about her! Pietro is a good man, and he deserves Kate."
"Then who do I deserve?" Zelos leaned towards her a little, wearing a sly smile.
Raine blushed, "I-I don't know! Don't ask me!" She threw her first mate cap at him, which he caught in his hand.
"No need to be angry, my cool beauty, I was only asking a question." He stood up and walked over to her. "I was just thinking that I could find someone with whom I could simply settle down with and end the legacy of 'The Playboy Chosen'. Who knows? I might even find her on this ship." He looked into Raine's eyes, and she blushed, her cheeks turning into the color of tomatoes. "Now be more first mate-like and get me a drink!" He placed the cap on Raine's head, and walked back to his chair, laughing.
The cap slipped down over Raine's eyes a little. She placed it properly on the top of her head, and smiled. "Yes, captain!" She put her hand up in a salute, and ran into the kitchen.
"That's the spirit!"
Back on the deck:
Lloyd and Sheena traveled to the stern of the ship where they were alone. Lloyd sat against the back wall that separated them from the engine room. It was cold outside, and the wall kept him warm due to the engine. It whirred and hummed with the moving parts inside it creating heat and turning power for the propellers. Sheena was still standing up, and was looking at the stars. The wind was beginning to pick up, and she shivered.
"Sheena, why not come and sit down next to me?" Lloyd asked.
"No, I'm find," She masked her shivering very well. It would've working if Lloyd din't notice the goosebumps on her arms.
"Quit acting tough. It's not working. And it's hard to take that seriously when you're wearing that." He smiled truimphantly. Sheena shrugged, as if admitting defeat, and sat down next to him. She was still shivering, though. Lloyd noticed this, and unbuttoned the coat-like upper body part of his Nobleman outfit.
"Wh-what are you doing!?" Sheena yelled, unaware of his true intensions. He got it off, showing a white undershirt underneath.
"What're you getting so flushed for?" He draped it over her shoulders, and leaned back against the wall.
She blanked out for a moment, and then shook her head, "H-hey! Wait a sec! You'll get cold now!"
"Nah. I'm fine; the engine is keeping me warm." He smiled, not showing any sign of being cold.
"Grr. Idiot." She took the side of the coat closest to him, and wrapped it around his opposite shoulder. They were both being warmed by the coat and eachother. Sheena nuzzled up next to him, and leaned on his shoulder with her eyes closed. Lloyd blushed slightly, and put an arm around her shoulders, pulling her in close. Surprised and delighted at his quick response, Sheena placed a small kiss on his cheek.
Lloyd smiled and ran his fingers through her wavy hair. "I think that we should tell everyone in the morning."
Sheena smiled back lovingly. "We won't hear the end of it from Zelos, but it's now or never, right?" Lloyd held her close, and they chuckled a little. Suddenly, Lloyd noticed something. He coulnd't put his finger on it, but something in the background of the scene was missing...
"Oh, man..."
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A/N: HA! Cliffhanger, biatch!XD Read and review if you want. I'll put up the next chapter when I get a few reviews. The next chapter will show you what this cliffhanger is all about, so wait for it! Until next time.
King Kamor/JKH
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Posted: Sun Apr 09, 2006 7:48 pm
Cliffhanger?! NOOO!!!!
Okay, some little advice:
Proof-read. I found quite a few spelling mistakes, and though the context helped me figure out what you were trying to say, it won't always save you. That's all I've got, keep it up.
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Posted: Sun Apr 09, 2006 9:20 pm
KirbyVolt Cliffhanger?! NOOO!!!! Okay, some little advice: Proof-read. I found quite a few spelling mistakes, and though the context helped me figure out what you were trying to say, it won't always save you. That's all I've got, keep it up. yeah, i thought that i missed a few. I was in a hurry. sweatdrop anyway, thanks for posting. I'll probably have the next chapter up in a few days.
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Posted: Fri Apr 14, 2006 3:38 pm
Disclaimer: I don't own ToS or any of it's characters, only this fanfic, which I am growing quite fond of writing.
Just as a little side note, all of the exphere-powered machines in the world have been destroyed or have had their expheres removed. Everything now runs on gas or Volt's electricity. Oh, and the type of fuel the boat uses is... um... gas... Yeah, that's it... Don't look at me that way.
And some of you may have noticed the lack of Regal, Presea, and Kratos in the last chapter, so I added a short scene with them. It's just really hard to grasp their seriousness as characters, y'know? Luckily, there is next to no seriousness in this chapter, so I'm safe until the next chapter!
It seems that the more chapters I post, the more people come and read it. It always makes me smile when people enjoy my work, so tell me what I can do to get better. Now, on with it! XD
Chapter 4: Potions in the Engine Room
Lloyd and Sheena dashed up the stairs to the bridge where Zelos and Raine were, Lloyd still tugging his arm through the sleeve of his white trench coat. When they reached the door, slightly fazed by the sign, Lloyd burst through it and shouted, "Zelos! We have a problem!"
Zelos was sitting in his captain's chair, drinking a Flanoir Snow Tear, a blue colored alcoholic drink that was made by fermenting frozen plant roots in Flanoir. He was talking to Raine, also drinking some Snow Tear, who was sitting a few feet away from him in her own chair. They had pulled the table closer to him so they could put their drinks on it.
"Whassa matter, Bud?" Zelos said, obviously at least a little drunk.
"Lloyd, must you shout so loudly?" Raine said, taking another sip of the blue concoction from her short glass. Her face was flushed slightly, but not as much as Zelos.
"The engine's stopped!" Lloyd yelled in a serious tone. There was a silence. Zelos quietly set his drink down on the table, and stood up with an angered look on his flushed face.
"Whaddaya mean the engine stopped?"
"We were standing outside the engine room, and the humming of the engine suddenly stopped!" Sheena claimed.
Raine stood up, as well, "I guess we'll have to go into the engine room and fix it, right?" She stepped outside and started down the stairs, still holding her drink. Zelos grabbed the whole bottle for some reason, and ran after her, swaying slightly. Lloyd and Sheena followed them. Once outside the engine room door, Raine said, "It would be in everyone's best interest if everybody else was oblivious to what's happened. Agreed?"
"I'm down," Zelos said. Lloyd and Sheena nodded their heads in agreement. Zelos searched through his pocket, and pulled something out. It must've been the key. He put it into the key slot and turned... nothing happened. Lloyd took a closer look, and saw that it was a breath mint!
"What the hell, Zelos!" Lloyd shouted.
Zelos looked down at the breath mint with surprise. "Wait a second, that can't be right..." Zelos said groggily.
"Just get the key, you damned idiot!" Sheena yelled.
"Calm down, my voluptuous hunny, everything's under control!" He pulled the key out of his pocket, and after about the third try put it in the keyhole. The door led directly to a staircase that led deeper into the ship. It was dark, and nobody could see very well. Raine searched around the walls of the staircase for a switch, and finally found one, turning on a reddish light in the room below the staircase. Everyone stepped in, and Zelos closed the door behind them.
"Okay, it looks like it's just out of fuel," Raine said once they reached the engine, which took up the entire wall opposite the staircase. She looked around for some fuel until her eyes came across three small tanks. "Here we are," She said as she walked over to them. "Lloyd, can you pour this into the valve over there?"
"Why me?" Lloyd asked, surprised that she didn't ask Zelos to do it.
"Because Sheena and I can't lift those by ourselves."
"And I won't be caught dead getting my beautiful skin messy with oil!" Zelos said, putting hand on Lloyd's shoulder to keep himself from falling down. Lloyd grumbled, and grabbed one of the tanks. After he poured all three of them into the engine's main tank, his white clothes were all dirtied up with oil.
"Thank you, Lloyd. Zelos, pull that lever over there, will you? And Sheena, press that small red button on the engine after that." Raine commanded, pointed Zelos towards the vertical lever on the wall. He staggered over to it, and pulled it downwards. Sheena pressed the button, and it started to flash red. A loud starting-up groan sound came from the engine, but it started to purr like a kitten in no time. Raine crossed her arms, triumphant about her accomplishment. "Good work, everyone. Now let's get back to the party, shall we?" She started up the stairs to the door. Everyone followed her.
"Man, now I'll have to wear something else," Lloyd said, looking at the oil stains on his trench coat.
"It's fine, you can just wear your normal clothes and get back to the party after you change," Sheena said.
"Honestly, Lloyd when the young man who saved the world starts complaining about--" Raine stopped mid-sentence just as she grabbed the doorknob.
"What's wrong, Professor?" Lloyd asked.
"...It won't open..."
Up on deck:
Regal was leaning back in a chair next to the deserts table. He was looking at his left hand with a serious look in his eyes. After about another minute, he put it down and looked at his right hand the same way. The skin on his wrists were wrinkled beyond repair by the shackles, and were a slightly darker shade of tan. Presea noticed the look in his eyes, and walked over to him.
"Regal? Is... everything alright?" She asked, her emotions finally starting to show for once.
Regal glanced down at her, and closed his eyes as he rested his hands on his lap. "It's nothing, Presea." He said with a small smile. "It's just that..." He looked at his left hand, keeping the right one out of sight, "I haven't seen my hands apart for so long... They almost seem lonely without each other..."
"Our hands cannot feel emotions, they are merely extensions of our bodies, used for--"
"I know, Presea," Regal interrupted, smiling her obvious statement. "But I've put my emotions of atonement into these hands so thoroughly that I gave them scars that will never heal. Before I killed Alicia, I treasured them so dearly, and look what I did to them for so many years... They hurt so badly the first year I wore the shackles." He dropped his hand and smiled again, "Just forget that I said anything."
Presea looked at him with a cocked head, her pigtails swaying slightly with the movement. "Perhaps your hands aren't hurting now because they are thanking you for keeping your promise," She said, a sweet smile spreading across her face.
Regal looked at her with surprise, and stuttered, "P-Presea, you..." She smiled at him, putting her hands together behind her back. Regal was bewildered at her statement. He then said slyly, "But you said that hands cannot have emotions, didn't you?"
"I say many things," Presea said, and pranced back towards Genis and Chocolat.
"Psh... hypocrite..." He chuckled, and leaned back on his chair once again, gazing at the stars.
"Regal..." A deep and serious voice sounded behind him. He turned around and saw Kratos, wearing a black and white version of his purple outfit... and a conspicuous red bowtie.
"Oh, Kratos," Regal said, standing up from his chair, "What took you so long to get dressed?"
"I had trouble with the door. It was locked from the outside, so I had to wait for someone, Pietro, to open it for me. All of the doors and walls on this ship seem to be built very well. What are they made of?"
"Ask Zelos, he's the one who chose the materials for this ship. But I'll tell you one thing, not even I, with my hands, could break down one of these walls or doors. There is no way that the hull could ever be breached, we're all perfectly safe in this unsinkable ship."
"And if we're locked in a room?"
"Then Martel help you!" They laughed wholeheartedly at his joke.
In the engine room:
"What do you mean it won't open?" Lloyd and Sheena shouted in unison.
"It's as I said, it won't open!" Raine yelled, kicking the door with her white boots.
"Zelos! you left the key in the lock on the outside!" Sheena shouted angrily at the Chosen of Tethe Alla. She pushed him into the railing of the stairs. Raine kept trying to kick the door down with all her might, which, to be honest, was a lot of power. Lloyd knew this, and shuddered slightly at the memory of being kicked by Raine.
"That won't work, mah gorgeous first mate," Zelos said, catching himself on the railing. "This thing's built solid as a rock... joo guys can't open it without the key, aright?"
They traveled back down the stairs to the basement-like engine room. Lloyd sat down against one of the walls, and let out a sigh. Sheena sat next to him, making sure that her skirt was in the proper position before seated. Raine, realizing the heat coming from the engine, took off her orange jacket, showing her white long sleeve scholar shirt. This also revealed her figure more, which Zelos took immediate notice to. He walked over to a door underneath the staircase, and opened it. Is he getting something to help get us out? Lloyd thought. Zelos went in and came out with two more wine bottles.
"What the? Why's there alcohol in there, Zelos?" Sheena asked, confused.
"Yeah, it's creepy that you keep drinks in the engine room." Lloyd said, taking off his trench coat.
"It's awright, I just ran out of room in the kitchen," Zelos said, brandishing three glasses from a shelf in the small room.
"That's even creepier!" Lloyd yelled.
"Aw, lighten up, and have a drink, Bud!" Zelos tossed him a glass. "You, too you crazy banshee woman!" He tossed another to Sheena.
"No, we're under aged!" Sheena pointed out.
"It's true, Zelos, their bodies haven't aged enough to hold much alcohol. I'm against letting them drink," Raine said, fanning herself.
"C'mon! You guys saved the world! Who's gonna complain if you have a drink or three, huh?" Zelos poured some Flanoir Snow Tear into Lloyd's glass and some Palma Potion into Sheena's glasses.
"Well, okay, maybe just a sip," Sheena said, looking at the blue liquid curiously.
15 minutes later:
(insert "Fun with Idol!" from ToS Soundtrack disk 4)
"Gimme another, Zelos!" Lloyd yelled, his cheeks flushed, his empty glass thrust towards Zelos, who was drinking out of the bottle.
"That's what I wanna hear, bud! Time to start the real party!" Zelos shouted, pouring what was left into the glass, though he was swinging it around so much that it was barely a quarter full. Sheena and Raine were sitting next to each other, watching Zelos and Lloyd dancing around, drunk as hell. Lloyd had taken off his shirt due to the heat, and Zelos had taken off his pink vest. Both of the girls' faces were flushed red, and Raine had to take off her white shirt, showing a gray tank top underneath, bra straps showing. She had also taken off her boots. Raine was surprisingly controlled when she was drunk. She hardly let out so much as a mispronounced word as she talked to Sheena.
"So, Raine," Sheena said, putting an arm around Raine's neck, a sly smile spreading across her mouth, "I heard from m'self that you like someone!" She held her drink in the air as if in celebration.
Raine closed her eyes after another sip and said, "you're drunk, Sheena, you should stop."
"Naw, I'm jus' fine!" Sheena hiccupped, "Anywho, joo were sayin' you like someone?"
"No, you assumed that I like someone. Stop putting words in my mouth!"
"Aw! C'mon! If I tell you who I like, joo'll tell me who joo like?" Sheen a hiccuped again.
Raine glanced at Sheena, and took another sip of some Palma Potion, "I guess that's okay."
"I'm in love whit Lloyd."
"Wh-what!?" Raine yelled in surprise, spitting out some of her drink. She realized how loud she was, and leaned in close to Sheena, whispering, "You love him?"
Sheena snickered, a half happy half drunk smile on her face, "Yup, he's mah man." She suddenly turned to almost serious, and set her drink down. "When I first joined you guys in that whole adventure, or whatever you wanna call it, I just felt something... I dunno, eternally good about him. He makes me feel like the world could actually accept me and my summoning abilities. He makes me feel at home, somehow..."
Raine gazed at Sheena and then glanced at Lloyd, who was still dancing around with Zelos; she wasn't too surprised. She let out a sigh and looked up at the ceiling, "I guess that I'll have to tell you who I like, right?" She paused, looking at Sheena. "To tell you the honest-to-Martel truth..." She stopped. "Heh... heheh... hahahaha! Ahahahahaha!" Raine's laughter grew louder and louder, and she put her left hand on her head, her eyes sealed shut with joy. Sheena looked at the once-calm adult before her, confusion filling her mind. The half elven teacher eventually stopped, but a wide smile still remained. "But what does a scholar like me see in a man like him?" She asked nobody in particular. "I'm not sure, myself. Maybe I'll find out on this little vacation of ours..."
Suddenly, a ray of sunlight was shone through where the door was. Raine and Sheena covered their eyes, and could only make out the figure a very well-built man. Lloyd and Zelos stopped running around aimlessly, and looked up at the silhouette at the doorway. "Regal?" Raine shouted to him, standing up. Her body wobbled as she stood up. Regal walked down the stairs towards them.
"What are all of you doing in here?" Regal asked, confused like nothing else.
"Well, y'see," Lloyd said, putting an arm around Sheena's shoulders for balance, "Zelos the idiot here," He pointed at the space right next to Zelos, "locked us in here. Sooooo we've been drinkin' this stuff like there's no tomorrow!"
"It is tomorrow!" Regal shouted, "You guys have been missing since midnight last night!"
"Aw, crap, so there is tomorrow? I dun think we tried hard enough, Zelos! Now that all three of ya are here, we can really..." He fell flat on his face.
Regal looked down at him, and then at the other three drunks, "The rest of us thought that you four had gone to bed already, so we didn't worry."
Sheena rubbed her left eye and said, "What time is it?"
"I believe that it's at least seven in the morning. Now come on, you need to rest all of this off." Regal walked up the stairs to the now-open door. Sheena picked up Lloyd, put one of his arms around her shoulders, and lugged him up the stairs. Raine was about to follow when she noticed that Zelos wasn't coming. She walked over to him quickly.
"Zelos? Aren't you coming?" She said, taking Zelos's hand. Then, upon closer inspection, she found that Zelos was asleep standing up! After giving him a few light smacks across the face, he came to. She sighed, "How do you manage to sleep standing?"
"Good question!" Zelos said carefree of the fact that it's morning already, "Now, off into the unknown, my gorgeous first mate!"
A/N: Damn, was it fun to write them drunk! XD I wish that I could have that much fun every time I write! Maybe I should write Presea drunk... that'd be interesting! *plots* Anyway, I hope that you guys liked this chapter. It seems that my chapters are getting longer each time... sweet! The next chapter will have them arriving in Altamira. Until next time!
King Kamor/JKH
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Posted: Fri Apr 14, 2006 5:56 pm
Now I want to write about people being drunk...
Because of it's more loose feel, I really don't see a need to critique this chp. because of the fact they were drunk.
Nothing can be perfect, but you got close to it in this chp.
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Posted: Sat Apr 15, 2006 5:46 pm
KirbyVolt Now I want to write about people being drunk... Because of it's more loose feel, I really don't see a need to critique this chp. because of the fact they were drunk. Nothing can be perfect, but you got close to it in this chp. wow. no one's ever said that about my writing before. but, like you said, they were drunk, and there wasn't anything absolute about it. thanks for the review. (on a side note, i got Tales of Phantasia for GBA last night, and it's already taken up eight hours of my spring break! xd )
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Posted: Tue Apr 18, 2006 4:23 pm
A/N: Thank you all for liking the drunk scene. I'm quite fond of it, myself. It seems that a lot of you liked it, so I guess I'll be "forced" to make more in the future. kekeke. In other news, I seem to be developing a life outside the internet (gasp!) And by life, I of course mean school, chores, and Tales of Phantasia (lol).
Raine: You wrote me drunk. Don't think that I'll forget this.
Sheena, Lloyd, and Zelos: Us too!
Me: Um... sorry?
Sheena: And why the hell did you pair Raine with Zelos? I mean, how opposite can their personalities be!
Me: Oh, come on, it's humorous!
Presea: There is a 92.518954 percent chance that it isn't funny.
Me: (cries in a corner)
Zelos: I liked it! XD
Raine: (pwns Zelos with her staff of almighty doom)
Zelos: (in a world of pain)(twitch)
Me: (sweatdrop)Anywho, I hope that people are starting to like my fic.
Celsius: (poofs out of summon spirit world and smacks King Kamor into the wall) They'll like it more if you start the scenes with me in it! Hell, I was even voted the most popular summon spirit in the ToS guild on gaia online!
Me: (in a world of pain)(twitch)
Raine: You hit him too hard...
Celsius: Uh... Whoops... Now that that's done with, the Disclaimer. King Kamor doesn't own Tales of Symphonia. He thought that he did once, but we had to call in the white coats and make him sleep for a day and half...
Me: (crawls out of the rubble) Now, on with it!
Chapter 5: The First Day: Part one
"Woohoo! My hunnies, welcome to the most beautiful resort in the world, united or no, Altamira!" Zelos shouted through the megaphone from the command center. It was in the middle of the afternoon, and the Symphonia had finally gotten in sight of Altamira. Raine stood next to the self-proclaimed captain, her head throbbing from her monster of a headache. Lloyd and Sheena were slumped against the wall of the bridge, asleep. It had only been a few hours since they were found in the engine room, and they lost all track of time while in there. Sheena was leaning against Lloyd's shoulder, and his head rested on top of hers. Zelos tried several times to wake them up, but to no avail. So he found a level 3 magic marker and would've drawn on their faces if Raine hadn't slapped him.
"We'll be docking soon, so everybody get dressed for the occasion," Zelos's voice blared, "As in, skimpy swimsuits for all of my hunnies here right n-OW! Hey! That hurt!"
"Turn that thing off, you're like a spoiled rich child with a new toy!" Raine's voice scolded over the megaphone.
"But I was a spoiled rich kid! Ow! Ah! Not the face!" The megaphone fizzled out, but no one needed it to hear Raine yelling at Zelos. She must have had one hell of a hangover. Everyone on deck smiled halfheartedly, and went back to their rooms to get 'dressed for the occasion'. Colette had to share a room with Chocolat, and Pietro and Kate had to share a room together. None of them complained, especially not Pietro and Kate. Regal stayed on deck, wearing his brown business suit with is hair tied back in a pony tail. He gazed out at the docks of Altamira out in the distance, the cheers of the crowds already able to be heard.
In Colette and Chocolat's room, Colette was putting on her normal Chosen outfit, but without the outer jacket that covered her shoulders. The jacket had covered up most of her surprizingly nice figure, which only looked plain compaired to Raine, Sheena, and not to mention, Chocolat. Chocolat was sifting through a wardrobe full of dresses. It was that way when she got there, so she felt the urge to look at each and every dress she could dig up.
"This one? No..." She said as she threw another one aside. Despite her dislike towards the dress, she wore a wide smile. The fact that she was about to be seen and recognized by such a large crowd in Altamira, it was all she could do the hold in her excitement. She tossed yet another one in the the pile of twenty-plus dresses on her bed. Then, as she put a blue, frilly dress up to her body to check it's size, she noticed a door on the wall to the left of the wardrobe. She walked over to it and opened it out of curiosity. "Oh... em... gee." Before her was a walk-in closet that was about half the size of her mother's item shop. Her legs seemed to grow weak, and she grabbed the doorknob to keep her balance.
In Pietro and Kate's room, Kate was getting dressed in the bathroom, and Pietro was looking at himself in the mirror in the dresser. He was wearing the same snazzy suit that he had worn the night before. As he gazed into the mirror, he could hear Kate humming a lively tune in the bathroom. He smiled and pondered on how he had met this woman.
Flashback:
"I-I'm so sorry, sir..." A woman with greenish blue hair said to a shopkeeper in Luin. Broken bottles of potions and splattered gels were scattered about the shelf she had just bumped into. One of the shelves had given out when she touched it, and everything came crashing down in front of her.
"You think that apologizing will pay me back for all of these potions and gels, you despicable half-elf!" The shopkeeper hit her across the face with the back of his hand, toppling her to the floor. Her spectacles flew off and landed at his feet, which he stepped on with a loud cracking sound. People in the shop had formed a small circle around them, keeping their distance from the shopkeeper. They had worried looks about their faces, thinking what he would do to her. "I'll bet that you did this on purpose! That's just like your kind to do something like this!"
"N-no, I simply lost my footing on a loose floorboard, and--"
"Don't lie to me!" The shopkeeper raised his hand to strike her again, but he felt someone desperately grasp his wrist, keeping him from hitting her. He looked back and saw Pietro holding on with all his might.
"Kres! What do you think you're doing to this poor woman?" Pietro shouted angrily.
Kres lowered his fist, "I'm punishing her for destroying this shelf!"
Pietro let go of Kres' wrist, "I'm sure that it was an accident," he walked over and held out a hand to her, "What's your name?"
"Kate," She said almost automatically, and grabbed his hand. Who was this man who had come to her rescue?
"P-Pietro! She's a half-elf! Even if it was an accident, she could very well be a Desian survivor!"
"Quiet, Kres! You know that Lloyd's group dissolved that organization completely! They destroyed all of their human ranches, and killed all of their leaders. What more would you want?" Pietro walked over to Kres, and bent over to pick up Kate's shattered spectacles. "Here, Kate. I can find someone in Luin to get these fixed." Kate was speachless.
Kres shuddered, and looked at Pietro with hateful eyes. "Pietro..." As Pietro turned around to face Kres, a hard fist slammed into his face. He crashed into the wall and slumped to the floor. Kate rushed to his aid. Several people in the shop restrained Kres from going any further in his fit of rage. "Now you're siding with those halflings? Think about what half-elves are! They're only half human, which is enough to take away any human emotion from them! You're a traitor!"
Later, Kate was helping Pietro walk back to his house that was just outside of Luin. He had twisted his ankle when Kres hit him, and had his arm around Kate's shoulder. They proceeded along quietly, without uttering so much as a word to eachother. Every time either of them would try to start up a conversation, nothing would come out of their mouths. They just kept walking. Once they got to Pietro's small, yet quaint, house, Kate was about to leave back to the main area of Luin.
"Hey, you can come inside if you want," Pietro said with a smile, opening his front door.
Kate whirled around in surprise, "N-no, I can't possably--"
"Please? It can get lonely when you live by yourself," Pietro said, sustaining the smile throughout his sad comment. Who is this man? Kate thought to herself. The next thing she knew, she was inside Pietro's home. It was only two rooms; a main room that doubled as the bedroom and the kitchen; and the bathroom. The bed had gray sheets and a shabby pillow, and the kitchen had nothing more than a small shelf with food and a fireplace for heating up soup. Right in the center of the room was a table with three chairs. Overall... it was better than the lab.
"You live here?" Kate said, standing on the small entryway rug.
"It isn't much, but I won't be staying here for much longer, anyway," Pietro said, limping over to a chair. He sat down, and motioned Kate to do the same. They ended up talking for hours, drinking some wine Pietro had gotten from the mayor. It was called Sake, a drink that he got from Mizuho as a gift, and gave to Pietro for his efforts in rebuilding Luin. They drank out of tiny cups, which looked like miniature bowls. The amount that they drank wasn't enough to get them drunk, though. As it turned out, Pietro didn't even seem to care that Kate was a half-elf. This made her so happy that all she could do was continue smiling and talking to this man.
"So you really know Lloyd's group personally?" Kate asked happily, completely forgetting the fact that se was talking to a human.
"Yes, that's right," Pietro said just after having another sip of Sake, "They're the ones that donated almost one million gald to the Luin reconstruction and expansion funds!"
"They did? I can't beleive that they had that much money!" Kate stood up and started walking around the room. Pietro went over to his bed and laid down.
"I guess that you could say that they were the ones that rebuilt Luin, not me," Pietro said with a somewhat sad tone.
"But you're the one who organized the reconstruction projects!" Kate protested.
"Oh, come now, it's only logical that people would idolize the heroes that saved the worlds rather than even pay attention to the likes of me!" Pietro poured another douse of Sake into his little cup. Kate trudged towards him, frustrated that she couldn't change his mind.
"Stop talking like-- ah!" Kate yelped as she tripped on the rug near the doorway... and right on top of Pietro... on the bed. She landed on him with her face on his chest, and a hand ended up on his shoulder. Pietro's arm flailed about when she landed on him, and fell across her back. Before either of them knew what the hell just happened, they were blushing furiously. Kate scrambled off of him, saying, "I'm sorry! I'm sorry!" Once Kate had sat on the floor next to the bed, facing away from Pietro, a deafening silence ensued. Even the light creeking of the hut could be heard over the silence. When their hearts stopped beating at light speed, they sat down at the table and ate dinner without uttering a word.
Later that night, Kate slept at Pietro's house. They hardly exchanged a word with eachother after the little 'accident.' When it came time to sleep, Pietro offered for Kate to sleep in his bed, and he on the floor. Kate argued that it was his house and that he should sleep in his own bed. They argued nonagressively, without changing their tone throughout the conversation. After what seemed like hours, or maybe just a few minutes, they agreed that the both of them would sleep in Pietro's bed with two separate blankets. Since Pietro's bed was somewhat small, they were forced to sleep back-to-back. Both of them had flushed faces throughout what Kate thought as the best night of her life.
Back to Reality!
Pietro snapped out of the world of his memories when he felt a tap on his shoulder. He turned his head to see what dress Kate had picked, but immediatly met his lips with hers when he did so. He had no time to see what she had chosen to wear, the only things he could see were her closed eyes. She had one hand on each of his shoulders from behind, and held the kiss for a few seconds before breaking it.
Pietro spazzed out, "W-w-w-what the hell was--!" He stuttered, looking nervously at Kate's joyful smile.
She giggled, putting her hand near her mouth, "I've been wanting to do that since our first night together! Now that I have, that's one thing off my list of things to do with you on this trip." She practically skipped to the door to the deck. Pietro just stood there, his tie askew, and a bewildered look upon his face. She's sure gotten more forward than before...
Later at the dock:
The shouts and cheers of what seemed like hundreds sounded at the docks, waiting for the Symphonia. Men, women, and children alike had gathered from the rosort to greet the heroes. There was even a group of Zelos fangirls who held up a huge sign that read, "We love you, Zelos!" There was a Kratos one right next to it, and a Sheena one with all of her fanboys somewhere in the back. The Symphonia came to a halt next to the dock, and a crew of several men tied it to wooden posts. The heroes that saved the worlds stood at the railing, waving at their adoring public. Everybody but Zelos and Regal felt uneasy acting in such a fasion.
Pietro and Kate held hands lightly, and scanned about the diverse faces of the crowd. Kate looked down, They'll all hate me for being a half-elf... she thought.
She felt Pietro squeeze her hand lightly, and he whispered in her ear, "Don't worry, They'll love you almost as much as I do." Kate blushed so red that she remarkably resembled the color of a tomatoe. She quickly hid her smiling face in her hands.
"Thank you! Thank you!" Zelos shouted over the cheering. He shot romantic looks at his fangirls, who fainted on sight, and sparkles seemed to float around his eyes. Kratos elbowed him in the abs, and crossed his arms. Zelos' wings popped out from the impact.
"This isn't a field trip, you know," Kratos said seriously.
"Actually, technically it is!" Raine retorted, chuckling. Kratos blushed slightly, realizing his mistake.
Zelos put an arm around Kratos' neck playfully, and continued waving to the crowd, "C'mon! Lighten up, Krat-man! This is a party and everyone's invited!"
Back up in the bridge of the ship, Lloyd and Sheena were still fast asleep. Aside from soft breathing sounds and the occasional hiccup, the room was peacefully quiet. Apparently, the material the ship was made out of was also completely soundproof. Thus, the immense sound of the crowd outside didn't bother them at all. Lloyd was leaning directly back on the wall while Sheena involuntarrily made his shoulder into a boney pillow. They dreampt pleasant dreams, and were undisturbed until Lloyd sneezed... for some reason.
Sheena snapped awake, and noticed how close she was to Lloyd. He did the same, and noticed as well. They both blushed, but didn't part from eachother. Instead, they scooted closer, and held hands. "Great party last night, huh?" Sheena said happily.
"Must've been for my head to throb this much... ow..." Lloyd rubbed his head, as if to bore the pain away. Sheena handed him a small pill, and said that, according to Zelos, it was good for hangovers. Lloyd believed in Zelos' experience with hangovers, and took one. His headacke went away almost instantly. He glanced over at the large clock on the wall to the left of the captain's seat. They had slept from seven in the morning to three thirty in the afternoon. Lloyd let go of Sheena and groggily stood up, stretching his arms and legs. Sheena did the same.
Suddenly, Sheena noticed something. "Lloyd?"
"Yeah?" He said as he stretched his arm over his head.
"Has the boat stopped?" There was a long pause.
Lloyd rushed over to the door that let outside. "Are we already at Altamira!?" When he opened the door, a tsunami of sound hit him in the face. People's cheers echoed throughout the room, and exploded their eardrums. Good thing they took Zelos' pills, or they'd be doubled over in pain from the sound. They looked out the door at the huge crowd at the dock, and then at eachother. "Shall we?" Lloyd asked smoothly.
"Let's," Sheena said as she took his hand.
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A/N: I'm glad to finally get this chapter up. It gave you a bit of insight on Pietro and Kate's relationship, which I had fun improvising on the spot... No, seriously (sweatdrop). It wasn't really necessary, but I hope you like it. The next chapter will have the characters dealing with the rabid fangirls/boys in the crowd, as well as a new story arc involving something I can't tell you about yet. I thank you readers for reading this humble fanfiction. Until next chapter!
King Kamor/JKH
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Posted: Sun May 21, 2006 10:17 am
Me: Soooooooo very sorry for the wait! I was busy with a bunch of projects at school!
Celcius: (jumps into the air and does a flying kick at Kamor/JKH) Why are Zelos and Kratos with the party at the same time!?
Me: (steps to the side, letting her crash into the wall) Um... convenient plot-hole?
Celcius: (crawls out of the rubble)What'd ya do that for?
Me: Hey, it was either my head or that wall. And I happen to know that your foot is harder than my head.
Celcius: Oh, so I guess that you want me to do the disclaimer now? >=(
Me: Yeah, that'd be good.
Celcius: Fine. King Kamor/JKH doesn't own the game Tales of Symphonia or any of it's characters.
Ivan: What's up, Jon?
Me(real name is Jon): Oh, but I own that guy! Me's the main character in my story!
Ivan: Yup.
Regal: This is your main character? I'll bet I could kill him with my patented Hadouken tecknique! HADOUKEN! (fires a blast of blue energy at Ivan.)
Ivan: (Blocks the blast with a barrier, and redirects the energy back at Regal, frying him to desired crispiness.)
Me: Aaaaanyway... I'm glad that everyone is enjoying this. Most people usually don't read up to the second entry on any other sites I've put my writings on. So, for those of you that have read up to here; Wow. Have a cookie. And some milk. Hell, have the entire dairy farm and cookie factory. You deserve it. Now, on with the story!
Regal: damned showoff... (fizzletwitchpainstingmoan)
Ivan: Uh... Sorry?
Chapter 6: Day one: Part 2
"Ah! My scarf! Give that back! Ow!" Lloyd yelled as a fangirl snatched his white ribbon-like scarf from his neck and ran of with it. In the interim, another fangirl cut off a lock of his hair. He held onto Sheena's hand, who was surrounded by fanboys. They were gazing at her voluptuous body in awe like the infatuated nerds they were (no offense to nerds, I'm one myself).
"Not the Face! No! Not my headband! NOT MY FREAKING HEADBAND!" Zelos shouted out as an exeptionally rabid fangirl ripped his headband off of his head. Next to him, Raine was being engulfed by fanboys and archaeologists, being asked questions, pummeled with digging site assignments, and asked for autographs. "Fine. Guardian!" A green glowing shield appeared around Zelos, and the fangirls were pushed back. While they were dazed, Zelos looked over at Raine, whose hand was sticking out of the heap of fanboys on top of her. He grabbed her hand, and yanked her out as he took out his wings. They shot into the air, away from the crowd. "I never thought I'd would have that many gorgeous hunnies!" He yelled excitedly. Raine simply shook her head in annoyance.
Back on the ground, the rest of the party was fended off the fans with various objects that were found in convenient places. Pietro, Kate, and Chocolat hid back on the boat, locking the door. Not even rabid fans could break through these doors! Lloyd had grabbed a push broom from a little shack on the dock and started beating them away. "Away with you!"
Presea found an oar and started wacking away at the crowd. "Do not think ill of us..."
Genis found a little kid's kendama and began to beat people away with it, using fire magic to help keep them away. "Burn!"
Sheena found a deck of playing cards somewhere, quickly infused them with wind power using Silva Seal: Wind, and blew people away effortlessly. Regal used his normal hands and feet, occasionally using his patented Hadouken tecknique. "Let's see if numbers can make up for the difference in strength..." Colette and Kratos flew into the air with Zelos and Raine.
"Shouldn't we help them?" Colette asked nervously as she hovered up in the air next to Zelos.
"They should be able to handle it themselves," Kratos said confidently, floating next to Colette, "They should be finished in at least fifteen minutes."
"Nah, I bet you they should be done in about ten minutes," Zelos said, letting Raine ride piggy-back without much objection on her part.
Ten minutes later:
"Wow, what a battle!" Lloyd said, wiping sweat off of his forehead. The landscape outside of Altamira was full of craters and burn marks, as well as several hundred knocked out fans. Those that fought were exhausted. The three angels and half elf landed in front of them.
"Boo-ya! Ten minutes! I so called that!" Zelos said in triumph as he thrust his fist in the air. Kratos silently handed over fifty gald, a vein of anger pulsing on his head.
A few hours later at the Lezareno company:
"Master Regal, do come in, sir," George said in greeting. Regal and the rest of the party stepped out of the elevator, dressed in their regular clothes. All twelve of them stood before the moustached man, waiting for him to tell them why he asked them to come. George sat at his desk and flipped through some papers before speaking. "All of you may have noticed that the hourde of fans has been eradicated. This is both good and bad. All of them were guests at the resort, so they have just missed out on their own vacations." All of them looked away from George, avoiding eye contact. They didn't know that they were all staying in the resort; the entire crowd slept in sleeping bags for Martel's sake! "As for the good news," George continued, "All of you have Altamira all to yourselves. Nobody will come to bother you for autographs and such. So, please, enjoy your vacation while you can."
Before everyone left the room, George motioned Regal to stay for a moment. Once the others had left, Regal stood silently in front of George, and George in front of Regal. "Sir, you are aware of what may happen at the exphere mines when we try to demolish it, correct?" George asked.
"I trusted you to take care of all aspects of the mine so that I could focus on the company's trade and income, but I was thinking of delving into the matter myself." Regal said.
"The scattered mana from expheres is still too unstable for us to do much. We both can think of one million reasons why not to demolish it yet, but I'm more worried about the reasons we can't think of. Sir, I suggest that if anything happens to awaken there, you and your friends should go and stop it."
"I agree completely."
George smiled, "Thank you for your time, Mr. President."
Regal smirked as well, "I haven't been called that for a good while"
At the beach:
"Wahoo!" Lloyd yelled as he jumped into the ocean from a leap of at least twenty feet. He had on his blue swim trunks, as well as his goggles and snorkel. The water sprayed up into the air as he plunged into it, doing a cannon ball. Sheena was on the beach, chuckling as he splashed around. She laid back on her towel, the sun gleaming off of her beautiful skin, and slid her sunglasses over her eyes. Back in the water, Lloyd and Zelos were wrestling eachother in and out of the water, and Kratos was simply laying on top of it as they faught. He let himself be carried by the current along with the waves that Zelos and Lloyd created. Collete was busying herself by building a sandcastle with Genis. He kept the sand damp with his magic, so that it wouldn't fall apart as easily. Raine was sitting at the beach bar... in the seat farthest from the water. Presea was sprawled out on the sand next to Sheena, wearing a purple and white one-piece swimsuit. Even though she was technically twenty-eight, she looked like a normal little girl taking a nap on the beach.
Sheena pushed her sunglasses up to her forehead, and looked at the pink-haired girl, "Are you awake, Presea?" She said. Presea just continued her soft, steady breathing. Sheena smiled slyly, and got up from her towel. She scooped up some sand and started to pat it onto Presea's belly. Seeing as the girl didn't wake up, Sheena persisted in the piling. Before long, a small mountain of sand covered all but Presea's head. Sheena was snickering deviously as she kneeled next to the mound, which was about as tall she was.
"What're you doing, Sheena?" Lloyd asked as he walked up to her. He grabbed a towel from his bag and began to dry himself off.
Sheena couldn't help but stare at his chest and abs, which were images far removed from what she usually saw of him. "Uh, I'm just burying Presea. She isn't waking up!" She laughed.
"That could be called cruel and unusual punishment, you know," Lloyd joked, and kicked the mountain of sand onto her. The sand cascaded down in a miniature landslide, and engulfed Sheena in a few seconds.
"AAAAGH! NOOOOO!" Sheena screamed, and acted as if she were truly being overcome by the sand. Lloyd was doubled-over laughing.
Over at Colette and Genis' sandcastle, they had just finished building the balcony for the southern tower... and gazed down at Zelos from it. The castle was at least twenty feet tall, had four towers, and had about a 25-by-25 foot area inside. Thanks to Genis' magic, the sand stayed solid enough for them to stand on it. Lloyd and Sheena didn't even want to know where they got all the sand for it without it creating a trench on the beach.
"Hey!" Zelos shouted up to them, "How the hell did you guys make this thing!? It's freaking huge!"
"Colette did most of the sand-patting, and I used magic to keep the sand from falling apart!" Genis yelled down to Zelos.
Zelos put his hand on his forehead, and looked at the ground, "You really need to get a life, shrimp!" Just as he ended his sentence, a fireball exploded on the sand next to him! "Ack!"
"I dare you to say that again, Zelos!" Genis shouted as he shook his kendama at the Chosen in a speedo.
"You brought your kendama to the beach?!"
Kratos watched from the water as Genis and Zelos began to hurl magic at eachother. Explosions and lightning strikes and blades of wind engulfed the masterpiece of a sandcastle. It eventually collapsed into a giant heap of sand that put Sheena to shame. Regal had walked in after it collapsed and KOed them both. There was silence on the beach. Kratos said annoyingly to himself, "What a waste of mana..."
"Regal!" Lloyd said happily as the blue-haired man walked towards him with Genis under his left arm and Zelos over his right shoulder. Both of them had large, red bumps on the top of their heads.
"Where've you been for the past few hours?" Sheena asked as she unburied herself from the sand, though most of it stayed on her body.
Regal laid them down on the sand and said, "I had some minor income issues with the Lezareno company."
"Okay, then," Lloyd said. He looked down at Presea who was, amazingly, still asleep! "Uhm..."
"What on earth did you do to her? She's covered in sand!" Regal asked with bewilderment. "What happened while I was gone?"
"Just a bit of fun, Regal. It's fine," Sheena said with a smile.
Later:
Lloyd and Sheena were resting on towels next to eachother, for both of them had gotten back into the water earlier to get the sand off of their bodies. Sheena had her hair down so that it could dry better. The sun was going down, and cast shades of red, pink, and orange across the horizon. Everyone but the two of them had left the beach for the hotel.
Lloyd sat up on his towel, "So, what do you want to do after we get changed at the hotel?"
"I'm not sure," Sheena said as she ran her fingers through her hair. She also sat up, and scooted towards Lloyd. She rubbed her head on his shoulder like a cat and said, "I wouldn't mind spending some more time with you, though," as she rested her head right below his chin.
Lloyd put his arm around her shoulders and said, "I wouldn't mind that, either." They smiled at eachother, and kissed just as the sun went down into the ocean.
Toize Valley Mines:
"What the hell is going on here, Ace?" George shouted to the mine-destruction operator, Ace. George wore his normal brown suit with a hard-hat on his head. Several miners sped past him towards the exit, their faces drenched in fear.
"When did you get here, sir?" Ace said. He had shoulder-length black hair, and wore a white tank-tope with kakhi cargo pants and brown boots. He was still in his twenties, but Regal had recognized his adeptness with explosives, and hired him to take care of the mines.
"I took Sir Regal's rheaird from Altamira. Now tell me, what's going on?"
"I'm not all too sure myself, sir." Ace said as he led George running through the mine shaft, which was full of workers who were fleeing in the other direction. "I haven't seen it yet, myself, but it has already killed several workers." George had a scared and serious expresion on his face. Sweat dripped down the side of his head as he thought of the possibilities of what had awakened in the mine. "Though it goes without saying, whatever it is isn't keen on the idea of us destroying these mines."
"If it goes without saying, then don't say it. Otherwise, you're just overstating the obvious and wasting time!" George said critically. "And no matter what you say, we're all in trouble right now." They stopped in front of the large stone door in the back of the mine.
"This is where we found it," Ace said inbetween breaths. The large stone door had cracks on the sides from the explosives that were used to open it. It was closed at this time. No human, not even Regal, could have set it back into place with such precision. Something non-human had closed it by itself and somehow melted the edges shut.
George looked fearfully at the door. There was a reason that Regal had sealed off this part of the mine... Martel, why did they have to open the door so forcefully? Now everyone will have to suffer through what is in there... George though to himself. Then, he noticed something different about the rocky walls around the door. "Ace...?"
"Yes, sir?"
"...What happened to all of the expheres on the walls?"
Ace looked about the walls of the mine, but there weren't any expheres to be found at all in the once-thriving mine. There was a thud from the other side of the door that echoed throughout the mine's walls. Ace and George turned towards it and started to back away, getting ready to run. Before they knew it, a long, thin, black blur burst straight through the stone door at them.
There was silence in the mine. Back at Altamira, the party had just said cheers at their dinner table at a fancy restaurant.
A/N: I hope that I get some great reviews from you guys.
Yuan: Hey, why am I not mentioned yet?
Me: Shut up and go take your brownies out of the oven.
Yuan: (smells smoke) AAAH! My brownies are burning! (runs into the kitchen)
Me: Anyway, see you guys in the next chapter! Hey, get out of my house, Yuan!
King Kamor/JKH
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Posted: Wed May 31, 2006 4:33 pm
Yay Chp. 6! =D. A plot is actually starting to surface... I wonder if there'll be any sacrifices later on...
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