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 Posted: Tue Mar 28, 2006 8:30 pm
(Edit) Ok My stories are now below.
On my page is a story I started, so far it has only three parts. Please take a look at it (the other parts are in My Journal). If you cant read it please let me know I can PM it to you. Please be completely honest about the story, spelling, plot (so far), and whatever else. I am open to suggestions. biggrin
Also I am not a very good artist (though some say I am) but I am full of ideas for stories, comics, plays, and songs. I am looking for someone willing to help me make an online comic (a.k.a web comic). You draw, I think and write. Simple right? 3nodding
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Posted: Sun Apr 16, 2006 9:15 am
I have finished Part 4 & 5 Please check it out and tell me what you think.
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Posted: Mon Apr 17, 2006 4:27 pm
Post it in the guild. You'll get better response.
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Posted: Thu Apr 20, 2006 7:35 pm
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Posted: Fri Apr 21, 2006 3:21 pm
Part I The King Of the Streets: The Story Begins I young man, in his teens, has always lived the life of violence. Unlike most of your voilent, crazed, and phyco maniacs, the young man has never used a gun against anyone. He may throw a chair at you or hit you with an iron pipe, but he hates guns. He has no real name only Stone, King of the Streets. He earned this name as he fights with no mercy. He will fight men, women, and children for he believes if you can throw a punch you can get your butt kicked. He has a chain witha D for the charm, his brother and a very few other fighters know him best as D. Living in solitude with only his little brother by his side, The Prince of the Streets, his only reason for living is to fight. Soon all this will change, but what can stop a man living off of others fear and pain? Maybe I'll tell you another time, or maybe I don't know myself, come back and check the Journals the answer will be revealed and a new evil shall rise. twisted See the rest of the story in my Journal
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Posted: Fri Apr 21, 2006 3:22 pm
Part II
Darkness loves Company
Due to a sudden spike in crime in the area, the King of the Street tournament has been postponed. Stone decides to go for a walk around, Kreagal, the city where he . He walked by a young woman, about his age. She was moving in about a block away from him. Normally he would care, but there was something strange that kept luring him back. He has never felt like this around a woman before, for as long as he remembers he has never felt any emotions or feelings of any kind. He went home, he did not ask for her name or even talk to here he just went home. That night he dreamed of this girl, but it was no pleasent dream, it was mare of a nightmare. The nightmare revealed that him, the new woman, and a strange and mysterious man, were on some elevated area looking down at his city completely destroyed. The only people alive is him and the other two with him. He wakes up in a cold sweat, "That girl," he says to himself "who is that girl?" He looks at his little brother, "Why wasn't he there?" The next day all he could think about was that woman and the dream he had. He ran into the woman on the sidewalk "Why hello there, said the young woman, "what's your name?" Dark looks down and says to her "Um... My name is D, I;m mostly known as Stone." "No its not," she says as she pulls out a picture of what apeared to be two different families, one with the girl on it and the other with him as a child on it and it seems to have a side ripped off. Next to him was a name, Derrel Walker the Prince of the City. "Who are you?"
To be continued...
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Posted: Fri Apr 21, 2006 3:24 pm
Part III
Cast
Narrator
Terri
Derrel
Troy of the Killer Knight Gang
Old Flames"My name is Terri, Terri Craven. I've been looking for you. I don't beleive you don't remember me."Derrel, still shocked, "Um, I'm sorry I don't remember much of anything. How did you get that picture? Where did you come from? Why are you here?""Whoa, one question at a time. First I got the picture from my father. He said that your father were best of friends My father was mayor of Lynbrook, a small town in the east, and your father was something like his advisor. Your father liked to think that you would be the next mayor if you would stay out of trouble, so he itroduced you to me.""Wait, you mean to tell me I was supose to be mayor of my own town, cool.""No, you had to be elected just like anywhere else *giggle*. Anyway, after my father was assassinated your father decided it wasn't safe in Lynbrook and decide to move else where. I heard that you, him, and your mother were in an accident. The wierd thing about the accident is that your body was never found so I decided to look for you and here you are. Oh and I have to let Daniel know your alive.""Daniel?""Yeah, an old friend of mine. He's in the ripped part of the picture. Why he ripped it I don't know. I guess he wanted to look at himself *giggle*. He has something to tell you but he won't tell me until we find you. It's something about a 'inner power within' or something like that. Something his cooky grandmother told him.""Inner power?""Stone!"This is Troy. Troy is the leader of the worst gang ever, The Killer Knights. Troy, and his gang, has never been able to beat Derrel so Troy decided if he can't beat him fair to kill him. "*sigh* Troy. What do you want."Troy came around the corner, a gun in his hand, "Say hellow to my little friend!" yelled Troy. "That is so corny and old," said Derrel as Trow started shooting for Derrel. People watched from there building when suddenly it seemed like everything stopped. Derrel looked around, everything seemed to be tainted blue. "Am I dead," he thought to himself but he wasn't shot "Is this that inner power thing that whats his face was talking about? If so how do I get back to normal?"Is Derrel Dead? Is this the "inner power" Daniel was talking about? Who the heck is Daniel? Find out next time. To Be Continued...
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Posted: Fri Apr 21, 2006 3:25 pm
Part IV
Cast
Narrator
Terri
Derrel
Troy of the Killer Knight Gang
Daniel
The Inner Power"What happend? Am I dead? Why is everything blue?""It's your inner power"Said a stranger, about Derrel's age, as he came around the corner with a wierd cane in his hand. "Who are you?""I am Daniel and this your inner power, the ability to stop time.""Then why are you able to move if I stopped time?""This staff given to me by my grandmother, a former Watcher. It was used to prevent other Watchers from using thier powers on her.""Others? Watchers? I'm confused, what is a Watcher?""First let's get back to normal. Close your eyes, relax, and step three feet to your right."Still confused, Derrel closed his eyes and stepped three feet to his right. Suddenly everythin returned to normal as the bullet, shot earlier by Troy missed and his a trash can. "How did I miss? You should be dead!""Well I ain't, but you will be. You see when mess with the king you gotta mess with the kings men."A group people known as The Kings Men, surrounded Troy. The Kings Men is a group of people that follows the command of the current King of the Streets. As they beat Troy senseless, Derrel invites Terri and Daniel to his place. "So these Watchers, what are they?""Watchers?""Yes, legend says that every one hundred years three people will be chosen at birth to either protect or destroy the world. We are the chosen ones, Derrel has the ability to stop time, I can teleport anywhere, and Terri can heal."Terri and Derrel, with a puzzled look on their face, continued to ask questions through the night not knowing that an evil force is watching them from a far. Who is this evil? Find out next time. surprised
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Posted: Fri Apr 21, 2006 3:28 pm
Part V Thanks to Shram, I've decided to continue the story. I was about to just end this and do somoething different but shram liked it and thought it was funny so I'll continue. Be sure to thank him.
Cast
Narrator
Terri
Derrel
Troy of the Killer Knight Gang
Daniel
Revolutionary 1
Revolutionary 2
Mr. Paine
The Revolutionary The next day they continued their conversation about the Watchers. Daniel told them about a group that are the only people that know of the Watchers. "They call themselves The Revolution. They have been trying to wipe out anything not human. You know, Vampires, werewolves, mutants, and of cause us Watchers.""Vampires, werewolves, and mutants aren't real, are they?""After what happend yesturday I'll believe anything."Meanwhile, the evil that was watching over Derrel and his new friends went to a mansion not far from the city. "Sir, all three watchers are together. Would you like me to call our special team, sir?"Standing in front of the window that looks over the city was a rich, powerful, and evil man by the name of Christopher Paine. Mr. Paine owns CP Industries which makes and distributes many products. He also secretly owns The Revolution and with his money and power he can do just about anything he wants. "No, I want to meet these kids,""But, sir,""Did you just interupt ME?""I'm sorry sir.""You better be. Now go tell them they won something. I don't know do we sell anything young people like?""Yes sir, we make several products.""Pick one. I don't care but them here NOW.""Yes Sir."Meanwhile back in the city. Terri, Derrel and Daniel are just talking and enjoying a sunny day. "I'm telling you, I believe robots will take over the world and kill us all.""But you don't believe in vampires and werewolves.""Right.""Both of you have serious issues."Suddenly two men in black suits appeared in front of them. "Excuse me. Hi, my name is Randol Smith.""And I'm Cornelus McFee. You have been chosen to test out our new product for young people your age.""Come with us to CP Industries and join others to test our new video game and other products.""Ahh, Livin Spam!""Ignore him, he has issues. I guess I could test your products.""I'm in.""I guess i'll go to.""Great follow us to the limosine.""We strongly apreciate your cooperation"What is Mr. Paine upto? Why invite the Watchers to his mansion? Didn't their parents tell them not to talk to strangers? What's wrong with Daniel? ROBOTS HELP! Just kidding. Find out next time.
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Posted: Sun Apr 23, 2006 8:16 pm
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Posted: Tue Apr 25, 2006 3:58 pm
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Posted: Wed Apr 26, 2006 6:06 am
This guild is dead. scream mad
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