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 Posted: Wed Apr 05, 2006 12:01 pm
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Posted: Fri Apr 28, 2006 6:36 pm
This is really good. I like how you have a unique way of making it flow. It was simple but eye-catching at the same time.
Sometimes, though, you use "your" instead of the places where you need to use "you're." I'm not sure if you're doing that on purpose. ._.
But I really liked reading it. =]
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Posted: Tue Jun 13, 2006 10:19 pm
It's an interesting piece which is well written. I'm not a big fan of suicide (which is what I thought happened, feel free to correct me if I'm wrong) but as I said the piece was well written.
Already mentioned was the use of 'your' instead of 'you're', but other than that it seemed grammatically correct and the spelling seemed right. Keep up the good work!
Now that I've gone over the good, however, I have to let you know that your thread has been locked because you did not follow the rules. Please go back and read the rules, then follow them. Once you have completed your critiques I will unlock this thread once the required time is up. Please PM me once you have completed your critiques or if I have made a mistake- which is always possible. Thank you.
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