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Kesna

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Posted: Wed May 17, 2006 8:48 pm

Last words

Now you lay me down for death
Waiting for my final breath
While you speak with warming charms
The demons wait with open arms
Your blade glimmers in the sun
I sigh waiting for it to come
I feel no pain as it descends.
Peace, I feel at the end of ends.

Posted: Sun Jul 16, 2006 8:58 pm

Yikes . . . A little creepy. Not my forte, but I liked it.

Allora Lang

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Mcfeegle

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Posted: Mon Aug 07, 2006 5:57 pm

It's flow and style make it seem like a happy poem, at least to me. But if you pay attention to the words, it's not happy at all. I like poems like that.

Posted: Wed Aug 09, 2006 3:43 pm

Clean cut and to the point.
Simple and elegant.
Part of my older style..
and I thought it was great.

Really good read this piece.

heart ~Remy

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Merenwen99
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Posted: Fri Nov 10, 2006 8:13 am

Wow. It's a good peace. I like how you started with the first line from the children's prayer, but with a twist. Very nice.

Posted: Mon Dec 18, 2006 7:38 pm

thank you so much. I got the idea for this sequence with dark words when one of my friends tried it. this is my favorite of the two I wrote... release is the other one.

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