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Posted: Mon May 22, 2006 2:52 pm
Promise
This is truly against all my belifes, I'm defying my religion. Although, I feel no harm in doing this. For my soul has been long gone from me, to you. You know its true. My blank stare, and pointless converstion haunts you, you know what you've done. I swore my love, my soul, my very being to you, and now you know its true.
Three years in the making, I'm starting to consume you. Taking back what is mine, with you. You try to stay sane, you try to make me see what aparent. Don't you think I see it too? But you refuse to give yourself to me, like I gave myself to you. You think my talk of such things is insanity, but the truth is, your scared. So Like I promised that day, that day I swore myself to you, I'll protect you and keep you warm. As I slowly make you feel and see the coldness I've lived in for so long, the same you've avoided and left me in. I'll hold your hand and help you see, how much you really care for me. We'll discover the same and different down this road we call love, wether it be lust or not. All because I promised. All because this one promise I swore to hold true. I love you.
Corey (uneasy heart)
Looking into your lovers eyes. You see the unborn child. This surly puts your heart at ease.
Picking up the beer your lover drank, seeing into the bottom. Swirling into a darkness of screaming, and red walls. Covering up your passed out lover, tears of red streaming down his wrist. The world slowly coming to an end, for him...
Starting the car, glisting tears running down her face. Knowing that child will never be born, with an uneasy heart.
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Posted: Mon May 22, 2006 4:07 pm
I really like the second stanza of Promise.
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Posted: Thu May 25, 2006 12:40 pm
wow this poem is inspiaring....*scribbles down notes*
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Posted: Fri May 26, 2006 9:24 am
what he said. exept spelt right. *steals poem*
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Posted: Fri May 26, 2006 7:46 pm
Cloud0.0Strife what he said. exept spelt right. *steals poem* *steals bunny ear's* xp
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Posted: Tue Aug 15, 2006 12:57 pm
Not bad, the rhythem needs some work but the message is there and very elegantly staited. Keep it up. 4laugh 1178
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