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 Posted: Mon Mar 28, 2005 8:21 pm
A fairy tale life ah the dreams that would come true.
Love and life something new. No evil around the dragon slayen , you and your prince for the rest of your days.
A lovely home. Envyed by all, dancing in a beutifull dress at the wedding ball.
All the ooh's and ah's as you enter making you feel like the center.
Sounds great right...being the prince's wife?
JUst remember it's a fairy tale life.
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Posted: Mon Mar 28, 2005 8:59 pm
Very good, if you could some how fit this with the other one. Love it would be a great poem. Veryy good tho keep up the writing.
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Posted: Tue Mar 29, 2005 2:08 am
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Posted: Sat Apr 02, 2005 9:04 am
The writing was good, but the structure could use a bit of work. I started thinking 'oh, it's poetry', then went to 'wait, it might be prose' and then thought it was suppose to be a mix. It was a bit confusing, but the content was still very good.
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Posted: Sat Apr 02, 2005 6:16 pm
I really liked it and I like how the structure was, it seemed free.
I think its really good.
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Posted: Mon Apr 04, 2005 1:03 pm
Good, and I not going to repeat what was already said about three or four times about structure, because I think you get that point. So to something realitively small. Near the end of line four, beautiful is misspelled. Other than the already stated it is nice. Keep up the good work. smile
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