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 Posted: Fri Apr 01, 2005 2:39 pm
Before I start the poem, I just want to say that I am YuHavery. My account got screwed up, so now I am on this character now.
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My heart aches without you
My soul sours without you
Love isn't just words
It is a feeling
A feeling of hope
A feeling of joy
A feeling I feel with you
I love you, its true
Never forget how much I cared
Never lose the hope we had
For if we broke up, i'd never be the same
I'd be torn up inside
It is no game
I love you so deeply
I want to be with you
For you are my soul
And you are my meaning in life
Please stay with me
I'd do anything
Just to hold you once more
Just to cuddle up to again
Please thing about my words
Think about my love
I'll stay with you
If you'll stay with me too.
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Posted: Fri Apr 01, 2005 3:14 pm
Ah, it's the return of Yuhavery, new and improved... not that there was anything wrong with the old you... or... whatever [ sweatdrop ]
The text is so small. My eyes! xp
Erm... the words seems a little obessive, only because you have one line which says "For if we broke up, i'd never be the same " thus, for me it means that they are still together so really these thoughts she or he shouldn't occur...
but on a positive note I like it!
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Posted: Fri Apr 01, 2005 3:27 pm
Thanks. I missed this guild so much.
Anyways, thenks for the feedback. I am not much of a poem writer, but I will try to fix it.
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