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 Posted: Mon Jun 05, 2006 9:48 pm
Post your commentary here. If you have a question I will try to address it here. I am constantly working on this story day by day. It may not be much but it will be something I wish to publish in the future, so by all means, critique me and help me make this a masterpiece.!
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Posted: Mon Jun 19, 2006 4:25 pm
Intro is up, take a look.
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Posted: Tue Jun 20, 2006 2:53 pm
I like it so far. preaty good. But the first post where Algus is talking to the reader is kinda crapy. It just looks like you threw it together in a few secounds ya know?
Keep it up man.
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Posted: Wed Jun 21, 2006 9:30 am
THat hurts, but technically yes it was thrown together. It was meant to describe the torment that Algus had endured through his life up to the climax. Which I haven't even gotten to yet.
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Posted: Wed Jun 21, 2006 3:33 pm
I didn't mean to hurt ya man.
I just saying it didn't look like you tried with it.
Everything else was good so far tho.
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Posted: Thu Jun 22, 2006 10:01 pm
It was meant to keep the reader. They want to know why its so blotchy, what happened it's so...vauge for a reason. To keep the reader interested.
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